Re: Request for English debconf template review
Steve Langasek <vorlon@debian.org> wrote:
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> + Most services that use Pluggable Authentication Modules need to
> + be restarted to use modules built for this new version of libpam.
>
> If the user doesn't figure out that Pluggable Authentication Modules == PAM,
> I don't see any reason to waste the space explaining it. :)
Debatable, but I think that seems a bit arrogant.
http://www.chicagomanualofstyle.org/CMS_FAQ/Abbreviations/Abbreviations09.html
It only adds 5 characters. Maybe should lose the leading caps too.
http://www.chicagomanualofstyle.org/CMS_FAQ/Abbreviations/Abbreviations01.html
> > + The following list of services were detected as running now [...]
>
> Hmm, inaccurate; we do no checking of whether the services are running, we
> are only detecting whether the services are installed and we use invoke-rc.d
> to handle the rest.
OK, that was me misunderstanding the original!
> But perhaps:
>
> Please check the following list of init.d scripts for services to restart,
> and correct it if needed. The script names must be separated by spaces.
> To avoid restarting any services at this time, use an empty list.
>
> ?
Seems fine to me.
> BTW, "empty the list" is misleading with the debconf readline frontend,
OK. The inconsistencies of the frontends makes templates fun.
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> > - Among the services that require restarting are the display managers kdm,
[...]
>
> Stylistically, I prefer my original again. :) But thanks for the
> suggestions.
My main motive was I don't like the roundabout of "Among the services..."
I'd even prefer "Services that require restarting include..."
At least, the original should lose the commas in front of "and" in lists
http://www.bartleby.com/141/strunk.html#2
and pick either "that service" or "this service" at the end.
Hope that helps,
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