Re: Suggested press release in reaction to RHAT dropping sparc and alpha
On Tue, 24 Dec 2002, Nathan E Norman wrote:
> On Tue, Dec 24, 2002 at 01:15:04AM -0500, Jaldhar H. Vyas wrote:
> > FYI, this is the final draft with the changes Colin and others suggested.
> > it is now being sent to email@example.com and firstname.lastname@example.org for wider dissemination.
> > The Debian Project (http://www.debian.org/), producers of Debian
> > GNU/Linux the premier Linux distribution created by the community for the
> you still need a comma here.
> > community, reaffirmed today its' ongoing commitment to supporting Linux on
> lose the apostrophe. should read "its".
The apostrophe should be there because it's a possessive isn't it?
(Is all this bickering the reason we are known as the IT industry? :-)
> > the Sparc and Alpha architectures.
> > Sparc and Alpha users enjoy the same vast breadth of free software (some
> > 10,000 packages in our stable distribution), bug fixes, and timely
> > security updates as any other Debian users. Debian, as an all volunteer
> strike this word?
Mm I think not because we are trying to emphasize it is this quality which
is salient. Leaving out the as de-emphasizes the importance of us being
an all volunteer organization.
> > organization can afford to support any architecture for which there is
> comma here.
> > sufficient community interest. This promises a long healthy life for both
> > our Alpha and Sparc binary distributions.
> I don't think you should use "our" here ... press releases tend to
> be written from a third person perspective. Perhaps simply
> This promises a long and healthy life for the Alpha and Sparc binary
> distributions of Debian GNU/Linux.
1. "our." emphasizes the "labor of love" aspect of Debian as opposed to
being a "product"
2. That they are distributions of Debian GNU/Linux is implied already.
Any further comments before I really, really send this out?
Jaldhar H. Vyas <email@example.com>
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