Re: Suggested press release in reaction to RHAT dropping sparc and alpha
On Tue, Dec 24, 2002 at 01:15:04AM -0500, Jaldhar H. Vyas wrote:
> FYI, this is the final draft with the changes Colin and others suggested.
> it is now being sent to firstname.lastname@example.org and email@example.com for wider dissemination.
> The Debian Project (http://www.debian.org/), producers of Debian
> GNU/Linux the premier Linux distribution created by the community for the
you still need a comma here.
> community, reaffirmed today its' ongoing commitment to supporting Linux on
lose the apostrophe. should read "its".
> the Sparc and Alpha architectures.
> Sparc and Alpha users enjoy the same vast breadth of free software (some
> 10,000 packages in our stable distribution), bug fixes, and timely
> security updates as any other Debian users. Debian, as an all volunteer
strike this word?
> organization can afford to support any architecture for which there is
> sufficient community interest. This promises a long healthy life for both
> our Alpha and Sparc binary distributions.
I don't think you should use "our" here ... press releases tend to
be written from a third person perspective. Perhaps simply
This promises a long and healthy life for the Alpha and Sparc binary
distributions of Debian GNU/Linux.
> For more information on the many architectures Debian has been ported to,
> please see http://www.debian.org/ports
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