Re: Debian-based distros in a new page?
On Mon, Sep 09, 2002 at 04:33:22PM -0400, James A. Treacy wrote:
> --- basedon_distributions.wml.orig 2002-09-09 16:26:41.000000000 -0400
> +++ basedon_distributions.wml 2002-09-09 16:31:00.000000000 -0400
> @@ -2,16 +2,16 @@
>
> <H2><a name="basedon">GNU/Linux releases based upon Debian</a></H2>
>
> -<p>There are a number of distributions based on Debian, some users
> -might want to take a look at these distributions <em>besides</em> the
> -official Debian releases for some reasons (better localization support
> -for their language, specific hardware support, etc.)
> +<p>There are a number of distributions based on Debian. Some users
> +might want to take a look at these distributions <em>in addition to</em> the
> +official Debian releases. This is done for a number of reasons (better
> +localization support, specific hardware support, simplified installation, etc.)
>
> <p>Debian welcomes and encourages organisations that want to develop
> -new distributions based on Debian, however, it asks this distributions
^^^^
`these'
> -to, in the spirit of Debian's <a href="$(HOME)/social_contract">social
> -contract</a>, contribute their work to the main distribution. So,
> -ultimately, all users can make use of such improvements.
> +new distributions based on Debian. However, it asks this distributions,
> +in the spirit of Debian's <a href="$(HOME)/social_contract">social
> +contract</a>, to contribute their work to the main distribution. So,
> +ultimately, all users benefit from improvements.
>
> <UL>
> <LI><a href="#debian-jp">Debian JP</A>
> @@ -50,9 +50,9 @@
> <H2 name="debian-jp">Debian JP</A>
>
> <p>Debian JP is a volunteer-driven effort intended in making
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
`to make a'
> -Debian-based distribution oriented towards japanese
> +Debian-based distribution oriented towards Japanese
> end-users. Improvements include internationalization of the Debian
> -distribution, all changes being later contributed to the main project.
> +distribution, with all changes being later contributed to the main project.
> The project started distributing <a
> href="$(HOME)/News/1998/19980828">a set of packages</a> for the
> <em>Hamm</em> distribution and now provides <a
> @@ -65,12 +65,12 @@
> <H2><a name="storm">Storm Linux</a></H2>
>
> <p>Storm was a Debian distribution based on Linux which <a
> -href="$(HOME)&News/weekly/1999/27/">appeared on 1999</a> (the first
> -alpha was released on <a
> -href="http://old.lwn.net/1999/0708/a/storm.html";>july</a>). Stormix,
> +href="$(HOME)&News/weekly/1999/27/">appeared in 1999</a> (the first
> +alpha was released in <a
> +href="http://old.lwn.net/1999/0708/a/storm.html";>July</a>). Stormix,
> however, <a
> href="http://old.lwn.net/2001/features/Timeline/?month=jan";>filed for
> -bankrupcy in the year 2001</a> (some more information about this on <a
> +bankruptcy in the 2001</a> (some more information about this can be found on <a
> href="http://newsforge.com/article.pl?sid=01/01/27/1451236&mode=nocomment";>newsforge</a>). Stormix
> received some good reviews (such as <a
> href="http://linuxpower.org/display.php?id=162";>this one</A> and <a
> @@ -84,20 +84,20 @@
>
> <p>Corel developed a distribution based on Debian bundled with its
> WordPerfect and other Corel software. Corel chose Debian because
> -<em>(..) it offers an excellent fit with the company's existing
> +<em>...it offers an excellent fit with the company's existing
> customer base and Linux mission. Debian has a solid charter, a strong
> worldwide developer base and a thorough testing period</em> as
> described in its <a
> href="http://www.corel.com/news/1999/may/may_1999_faqs.htm";>FAQ</a>.
> -It was released on <a href="$(HOME)/News/weekly/1999/44/">november
> +It was released on <a href="$(HOME)/News/weekly/1999/44/">November
> 1999</a>, after a few public <a
> -href="http://old.lwn.net/1999/features/CorelLinux/";>betas</a> which
> -did open some discussion due to the fact that Corel had elected KDE
> -for it's GUI and KDE license issues where not yet solved within
> +href="http://old.lwn.net/1999/features/CorelLinux/";>betas</a>. This
> +opened some discussion due to the fact that Corel had elected KDE
> +for it's GUI and KDE license issues were not yet solved within
^^^^
`its'
> Debian. Three different editions were published from 1999 to the end
> of the year 2000. However, in the year 2001 it <a
> href="http://www3.corel.com/cgi-bin/gx.cgi/AppLogic+FTContentServer?pagename=Corel/PressRelease/Details&id=ZZZZ8DJU78T";>announced</a>
> -it's intention to spin-off the Linux distribution.
> +it's intention to spin off the Linux distribution.
^^^^
`its'
Matt
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