Re: Debian-based distros in a new page?
Here are some suggested changes to the file. I only corrected for
spelling and grammar. I do have two questions though. Should we keep the
historical (not produced anymore) distros? Second, the section on Corel
talks about KDE licensing issues. That doesn't seem relevant to this
page. Shouldn't it be removed?
--- basedon_distributions.wml.orig 2002-09-09 16:26:41.000000000 -0400
+++ basedon_distributions.wml 2002-09-09 16:31:00.000000000 -0400
@@ -2,16 +2,16 @@
<H2><a name="basedon">GNU/Linux releases based upon Debian</a></H2>
-<p>There are a number of distributions based on Debian, some users
-might want to take a look at these distributions <em>besides</em> the
-official Debian releases for some reasons (better localization support
-for their language, specific hardware support, etc.)
+<p>There are a number of distributions based on Debian. Some users
+might want to take a look at these distributions <em>in addition to</em> the
+official Debian releases. This is done for a number of reasons (better
+localization support, specific hardware support, simplified installation, etc.)
<p>Debian welcomes and encourages organisations that want to develop
-new distributions based on Debian, however, it asks this distributions
-to, in the spirit of Debian's <a href="$(HOME)/social_contract">social
-contract</a>, contribute their work to the main distribution. So,
-ultimately, all users can make use of such improvements.
+new distributions based on Debian. However, it asks this distributions,
+in the spirit of Debian's <a href="$(HOME)/social_contract">social
+contract</a>, to contribute their work to the main distribution. So,
+ultimately, all users benefit from improvements.
<UL>
<LI><a href="#debian-jp">Debian JP</A>
@@ -50,9 +50,9 @@
<H2 name="debian-jp">Debian JP</A>
<p>Debian JP is a volunteer-driven effort intended in making
-Debian-based distribution oriented towards japanese
+Debian-based distribution oriented towards Japanese
end-users. Improvements include internationalization of the Debian
-distribution, all changes being later contributed to the main project.
+distribution, with all changes being later contributed to the main project.
The project started distributing <a
href="$(HOME)/News/1998/19980828">a set of packages</a> for the
<em>Hamm</em> distribution and now provides <a
@@ -65,12 +65,12 @@
<H2><a name="storm">Storm Linux</a></H2>
<p>Storm was a Debian distribution based on Linux which <a
-href="$(HOME)&News/weekly/1999/27/">appeared on 1999</a> (the first
-alpha was released on <a
-href="http://old.lwn.net/1999/0708/a/storm.html";>july</a>). Stormix,
+href="$(HOME)&News/weekly/1999/27/">appeared in 1999</a> (the first
+alpha was released in <a
+href="http://old.lwn.net/1999/0708/a/storm.html";>July</a>). Stormix,
however, <a
href="http://old.lwn.net/2001/features/Timeline/?month=jan";>filed for
-bankrupcy in the year 2001</a> (some more information about this on <a
+bankruptcy in the 2001</a> (some more information about this can be found on <a
href="http://newsforge.com/article.pl?sid=01/01/27/1451236&mode=nocomment";>newsforge</a>). Stormix
received some good reviews (such as <a
href="http://linuxpower.org/display.php?id=162";>this one</A> and <a
@@ -84,20 +84,20 @@
<p>Corel developed a distribution based on Debian bundled with its
WordPerfect and other Corel software. Corel chose Debian because
-<em>(..) it offers an excellent fit with the company's existing
+<em>...it offers an excellent fit with the company's existing
customer base and Linux mission. Debian has a solid charter, a strong
worldwide developer base and a thorough testing period</em> as
described in its <a
href="http://www.corel.com/news/1999/may/may_1999_faqs.htm";>FAQ</a>.
-It was released on <a href="$(HOME)/News/weekly/1999/44/">november
+It was released on <a href="$(HOME)/News/weekly/1999/44/">November
1999</a>, after a few public <a
-href="http://old.lwn.net/1999/features/CorelLinux/";>betas</a> which
-did open some discussion due to the fact that Corel had elected KDE
-for it's GUI and KDE license issues where not yet solved within
+href="http://old.lwn.net/1999/features/CorelLinux/";>betas</a>. This
+opened some discussion due to the fact that Corel had elected KDE
+for it's GUI and KDE license issues were not yet solved within
Debian. Three different editions were published from 1999 to the end
of the year 2000. However, in the year 2001 it <a
href="http://www3.corel.com/cgi-bin/gx.cgi/AppLogic+FTContentServer?pagename=Corel/PressRelease/Details&id=ZZZZ8DJU78T";>announced</a>
-it's intention to spin-off the Linux distribution.
+it's intention to spin off the Linux distribution.
<p>Corel Linux was available from <url "http://linux.corel.com/";>.
User's wishing to upgrade to newer Debian releases can use, as a guideline,
@@ -122,16 +122,15 @@
distribution to use if you want to just give Linux a try and see how
it works and what can it offer you.
-<p>Since the 2.0 version it is <a
+<p>Since version 2.0 it is <a
href="http://www.demolinux.org/en/versions/version-debian.html";>Debian-based</A>
-(yes, the 3.0 version is <a
+(version 3.0 is <a
href="http://www.demolinux.org/en/versions/liste-simple-deb.3.0";>also</a>
Debian based).
-<p>DemoLinux is available from <url "http://www.demolinux.org/";>, you
-can get the CD images from <url
-"ftp://www.demolinux.org/pub/demolinux/";> (but please try first some
-of the <a
-href="http://www.demolinux.org/en/distribution/obtenir-demolinux.html";>mirrors</A>).
+<p>DemoLinux is available from <url "http://www.demolinux.org/";>
+CD images can be obtained from <url
+"ftp://www.demolinux.org/pub/demolinux/";> (please try one of the <a
+href="http://www.demolinux.org/en/distribution/obtenir-demolinux.html";>mirrors</A> first).
--
James (Jay) Treacy
treacy@debian.org
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