Re: Draft announce of Debian 6 LTS, please review quickly

[Lucas Nussbaum <leader@debian.org>]

Hi,

On 13/06/14 at 12:56 +0200, Raphael Hertzog wrote:
> <p>For organizations that cannot contribute their own workforce to the LTS
> team, <a href="http://www.freexian.com";>Freexian</a> — a French company
> owned by Debian Developer Raphaël Hertzog — offered to act as an intermediary
> between organizations interested in funding LTS work, and individual Debian
> contributors preparing LTS security updates. For more information, see
> Freexian's presentation of its
> <a href="http://www.freexian.com/services/debian-lts.html";>Debian LTS
> offer</a>.</p>

On one hand, it's clearly in Debian's interest to gather as much support
as possible around LTS, and what Freexian is organizing is a great way
to make progress on this. On the other hand, I would prefer if this part
of the announcement feels more 'informational' rather than like an
advertisement.

So, minor nitpicks:
> For more information, see
> Freexian's presentation of its
> <a href="http://www.freexian.com/services/debian-lts.html";>Debian LTS
> offer</a>.</p>
=>
For more information, see Freexian's description of this <a
href="http://www.freexian.com/services/debian-lts.html";>plan</a>.

> <p>The Debian Project welcomes this initiative, and is generally supportive
> of organizations exploring new ways to help sustain the LTS project and
> Debian in general.</p>
s/new ways/ways/

> <p>Shall Debian 6 LTS be a success, it would be reconducted and
> generalized so that Debian 7 (<q>wheezy</q>) and Debian 8 (<q>jessie</q>)
> would also benefit from Long Term Support.</p>

"it" is not very clear in this paragraph.

Lucas