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Re: [Pkg-xen-devel] Release notes addition for Xen support in Debian

Martin Zobel-Helas wrote:
> Thomas, if you don't mind, i still would like to tweak the text a bit.

Most of your changes look to me like definite improvements, except:

>> This does not happen under GRUB 2 in Squeeze.  Instead, the non-Xen
>> kernel will boot by default. 
> This behavior changed with GRUB 2 in Squeeze and the non-Xen kernel will
> boot per default.

An improvement, but the "and" is a bit weak - maybe...

  This behavior has changed with GRUB 2 in Squeeze: the non-Xen kernel
  will boot by default.

>> Also, upgrading from the Lenny version of Xen does not automatically install
>> the current 4.0 version. 
> When upgrading from Lenny version 4.0 of the Xen package will not
> install automatically. 

No, this needs clearer punctuation ("Lenny version 4.0"?),
preferably without the dangling modifier (version 4.0 of Xen isn't
"upgrading").  If you don't like my original version, how about:

  Upgrades from Lenny will not automatically install Xen version 4.0.

JBR	with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
	sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package

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