Re: [RFR] templates://rott/{templates}
Christian Perrier wrote:
> Please find, for review, the debconf templates of rott.
I like the template changes but I'm not as keen on the control file
ones.
> Rise of the Triad is a high quality, fast scrolling first-person perspective
> - 3D action game. It has destructive enemies and lots of them, an arsenal of
> + 3D action game. It includes a lot of destructive enemies, an arsenal of
> weapons from simple pistols to missile launchers, life-preserving armor, traps
> - and ambushes galore. It puts most of the other DOOM wannabes to shame.
> + and ambushes galore.
This is actually a quote, so instead of amending it we should
attribute it. (But I agree we should snip the comparison with its
early-nineties rivals.)
> This package contains no data files but may automatically download the
> - shareware data files from the internet and install them into your system.
> + shareware data files from the Internet and install them on the system.
This use of "may" it sounds like a warning. And I'd keep the
original "your system", though "on" it sounds better than "into" it.
(Or to make it more impersonal the simple approach would be to say
"...can automatically download and install the shareware data files
from the Internet".)
--
JBR
Ankh kak! (Ancient Egyptian blessing)
Source: rott
Section: contrib/games
Priority: optional
Maintainer: Fabian Greffrath <fabian@debian-unofficial.org>
Build-Depends: debhelper (>= 5), dpatch, libsdl1.2-dev, libsdl-mixer1.2-dev
Standards-Version: 3.7.2
Package: rott
Architecture: any
Depends: ${shlibs:Depends}, ${misc:Depends}, wget, unzip
Description: Rise of the Triad -- The HUNT Begins
"Rise of the Triad is a high quality, fast scrolling first-person perspective
3D action game. It has destructive enemies and lots of them, an arsenal of
weapons from simple pistols to missile launchers, life-preserving armor, traps
and ambushes galore."
-- Chuck Miller (Editor of Interactive Entertainment), 1995
.
WARNING: Rise of the Triad features wanton and gratuitous violence.
.
Homepages: <http://icculus.org/rott/>, <http://www.3drealms.com/rott/>
.
This package contains no data files but can automatically download the
shareware data files from the Internet and install them on your system.
--- control.orig 2007-04-17 10:09:46.000000000 +0100
+++ control.jbr 2007-04-17 11:35:11.000000000 +0100
@@ -9,14 +9,15 @@
Architecture: any
Depends: ${shlibs:Depends}, ${misc:Depends}, wget, unzip
Description: Rise of the Triad -- The HUNT Begins
- Rise of the Triad is a high quality, fast scrolling first-person perspective
+ "Rise of the Triad is a high quality, fast scrolling first-person perspective
3D action game. It has destructive enemies and lots of them, an arsenal of
weapons from simple pistols to missile launchers, life-preserving armor, traps
- and ambushes galore. It puts most of the other DOOM wannabes to shame.
+ and ambushes galore."
+ -- Chuck Miller (Editor of Interactive Entertainment), 1995
.
WARNING: Rise of the Triad features wanton and gratuitous violence.
.
- Homepages: <http://icculus.org/rott/>, <http://www.3drealms.com/rott/>
+ Homepages: <http://icculus.org/rott/>, <http://www.3drealms.com/rott/>
.
- This package contains no data files but may automatically download the
- shareware data files from the internet and install them into your system.
+ This package contains no data files but can automatically download the
+ shareware data files from the Internet and install them on your system.
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