Re: [RFR] templates://aiccu/templates
On Tue, Mar 13, 2007 at 08:06:21AM +0100, Christian Perrier wrote:
> The package control file, in cas eyou need some context:
>
> Source: aiccu
> Section: net
> Priority: optional
> Maintainer: Philipp Kern <pkern@debian.org>
> Build-Depends: debhelper (>= 4.0.0), po-debconf, libgnutls-dev
> Standards-Version: 3.7.2
>
> Package: aiccu
> Architecture: any
> Depends: ${shlibs:Depends}, iputils-ping, iputils-tracepath, iproute, debconf, lsb-base
> Recommends: ntpdate | ntp
> Description: SixXS Automatic IPv6 Connectivity Client Utility
> This client automatically gives one IPv6 connectivity
> without having to manually configure interfaces etc.
> One does need a SixXS account and at least a tunnel. These
> can be freely & gratis requested from the SixXS website.
> For more information about SixXS check http://www.sixxs.net
Here is my rewrite of the descript as requested by Philipp:
Description: SixXS Automatic IPv6 Connectivity Client Utility
This client configures IPv6 connectivity without having to
manually configure interfaces etc. A SixXS account and
at least one tunnel are required. These can be freely requested
from the SixXS website at no cost. For more information about
SixXS check http://www.sixxs.net
Rationale:
We don't use "One ..." in everyday English; it is very formal.
We don't use "gratis" in every day English; I think it is only popular
among free software types to distinguish it from the other "free"
(libre).
I am not entirely happy with the first sentence. Inputs from others
would be appreciated.
Here is my diff on the templates.
--- aiccu.templates.orig 2007-03-16 23:39:20.000000000 +1100
+++ aiccu.templates 2007-03-16 23:42:37.000000000 +1100
@@ -1,14 +1,14 @@
Template: aiccu/username
Type: string
_Description: Aiccu username:
- To successfully connect, you must use a valid username. This should
- be the one you use to log in to the website.
+ To successfully connect, you must provide your SixXS username. This is
+ the same username you use to login to the sixxs.net web site.
Template: aiccu/password
Type: password
_Description: Aiccu password:
- To successfully connect, you must use a valid password. This should
- be the one you use to log in to the website.
+ To successfully connect, you must provide your SixXS password. This is
+ the same password you use to login to the sixxs.net web site.
Template: aiccu/brokername
Type: select
@@ -25,20 +25,20 @@
Template: aiccu/badauth
Type: boolean
-_Description: Recheck authentication details?
- Apparently, the authentication details you specified were
- incorrect. You should try to log in on the tunnel broker website and
+_Description: Re-check authentication details?
+ The authentication details you specified appear to be incorrect.
+ You should try to log in on the tunnel broker website and
contact the site administrators.
Template: aiccu/nobrokers
Type: error
-_Description: No available tunnel brokers
+_Description: No tunnel brokers available
No tunnel brokers could be retrieved from DNS (_aiccu + _aiccu.sixxs.net).
This most likely indicates a DNS configuration problem.
Template: aiccu/notunnels
Type: error
-_Description: No available tunnels
- No tunnels are currently available for you. Please connect to the
+_Description: No tunnels available
+ No tunnels are currently available to you. Please connect to the
SixXS website at http://www.sixxs.net/ to request a tunnel for your
account.
Hamish
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Hamish Moffatt VK3SB <hamish@debian.org> <hamish@cloud.net.au>
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