Re: Proofreading request: dibbler package descriptions, attempt #2
On Friday, November 04, 2005 8:13 PM, firstname.lastname@example.org <email@example.com>
> On Thu, 3 Nov 2005, Adam D. Barratt wrote:
> Thanks. I appreciate it. Can I ask for second review? Here's improved
A few minor nitpicks left; sorry. :-)
> I have added homepage links (as suggested by Developer's
> Reference, 6.2.4) to all package descriptions.
That section also specifies an exact format for that line, namely
> Template: dibbler-server/start
> Type: boolean
> Default: true
> Description: Do you want dibbler-server to start when the system
> starts? Dibbler server can be configured to start at boot. Doing
> so, this node will act as a DHCPv6 server. It will provide IPv6
> addresses and additional configuration options to other nodes in
> the network.
I'd suggest s/Doing so, this node will act/This node will then act/.
Likewise for dibbler-relay/start.
> Template: dibbler-server/config
> Type: note
> Description: Modify /etc/dibbler/server.conf before running server.
s/running server/running the server/.
> Template: dibbler-relay/config
> Type: note
> Description: Modify /etc/dibbler/relay.conf before running relay.
> Without proper modifications, relay most likely will refuse to
> start or will not forward DHCPv6 messages as expected.
s/running server/running the server/ and s/modifications, relay most likely
will/modifications, the relay will most likely/.