Re: created software raid howto for debian systems
On Mon, 12 Jan 2004 18:41:42 -0700 (MST), Lucas Albers
<firstname.lastname@example.org> posted to debian-doc:
The above URL provides a simple facility for making changes, but one
needs a password. Is this something you encourage? Wouldn't it be
better to move the whole thing to a public CVS (say, on Alioth)?
I tried to make some changes but obviously didn't have the required
Here are some suggestions:
* Add a TODO section where you summarize things which still need to
* You refer to the sfdisk command which isn't standard; you should
list prerequisites (i.e. the util-linux package, and perhaps
others?) in the "Getting Started" section.
* Break things up into hierarchical sections. What to do before, what
to do during the upgrade, what to do after. Within those sections,
further break up each step unless it's entirely trivial.
* The HTML formatting needs a thorough overhaul. If you move the
source to DocBook or DebianDoc, the formatting tools will take care
of that for you, of course. In particular, the formatting of
commands is IMHO a bit confusing and unclear. Fixed-width type is
pretty much the standard when quoting command lines. Also subheads,
indentation levels etc. (which would follow from the previous
suggestion) could help make the document easier to read.
* s/easier then/easier than/
* Punctuation and paragraph divisions are somewhat erratic in places,
but perhaps you should work on the overall layout -- and perhaps
choose a more author-friendly format -- before tackling these
Hope this helps,
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