Re: Constitution - formal proposal (v0.5)
Two nitpicky comments:
On 02-Apr-98, 12:03 (CST), Ian Jackson <leader@debian.org> wrote:
>
> 1. Introduction
>
> The Debian Project is an association of individuals who have made
> common cause to create a free operating system. This document
> describes what decisions are made how in the Debian Project.
While the second sentence is certainly gramatically correct, I (a fairly
literate native speaker of english) had to read it two or three times
before I convinced myself of that fact, and understand the intended
meaning.
> This document describes the organisational structure for formal
> decisionmaking in the Project. It does not describe the goals of the
> Project or how it achieves them, or contain any specific nontechnical
> policies not directly related to the decisionmaking process.
The first sentence of this paragraph repeats the previous sentence, and
in my opinion more clearly. Perhaps both paragraphs can be combined:
The Debian Project is an association of individuals who have made
common cause to create a free operating system. This document
describes the organisational structure for formal decisionmaking in
the Project. It does not describe the goals of the Project or how
it achieves them, or contain any specific nontechnical policies not
directly related to the decisionmaking process.
Or perhaps the first sentence should be in its own paragraph, since it
is not really on the same topic.
I don't consider this a formal motion to ammend, just a discussion item
that Ian (or another) may adopt or not, as zie chooses.
Steve
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