Re: [Debconf-team] Fwd: Re: DC18 brochure & flyer final review

[znoteer@mailbox.org]

> Le 9 octobre 2017 à 18:45, znoteer@mailbox.org a écrit :
> 
> I meant to send this to the list.  Sorry.
> 
> ---------- Message d'origine ----------
> De : znoteer@mailbox.org
> À :  "ChangZhuo Chen (陳昌倬)" <czchen@debconf.org>
> Date : 9 octobre 2017 à 18:36
> Sujet : Re: [Debconf-team] DC18 brochure & flyer final review
> > Le 9 octobre 2017 à 09:44, "ChangZhuo Chen (陳昌倬)" <czchen@debconf.org> a écrit :
> > 
> > Hi,
> > 
> > The latest DC18 brochure & flyer are in [0]. Please help to review them
> > so that we can start to look for sponsor.
> 
> I found some regressions in the docs.  I'll send diffs in a few hours.

Attached are the diffs.

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--- flyer.en.tex_orig	2017-10-09 18:23:18.567411758 -0400
+++ flyer.en.tex	2017-10-09 19:02:05.265261914 -0400
@@ -220,8 +220,8 @@
 \vspace{0.2cm}
 
 For further information about Debian and DebConf, a complete description of the
-advantages of the various sponsor levels, as well as further sponsorship
-opportunities, please see our detailed sponsorship brochure:
+advantages of the various sponsorship levels, as well as further sponsorship
+opportunities, please see our detailed brochure:
 
 \end{large}
 

--- brochure.en.tex_orig	2017-10-09 18:23:18.283410067 -0400
+++ brochure.en.tex	2017-10-09 20:16:35.611872588 -0400
@@ -251,7 +251,7 @@
 \onehalfspacing
 \Large
 
-DebConf18 will take place in Hsinchu Taiwan in late July and early August 2018. We anticipate 600
+DebConf18 will take place in Hsinchu Taiwan in late July and early August, 2018. We anticipate 600
 attendees and major advances for Debian and for Free Software in general.
 
 We invite you to join us and support this event!
@@ -378,7 +378,7 @@
   \includegraphics[width=0.9\linewidth]{img/Bits_from_the_DPL.jpg}
   \label{fig:dc16-photo}
   \vfill
-  \footnotesize \emph{Chris Lamb updating Debian status as the Debian Project Leader}
+  \footnotesize \emph{Chris Lamb, Debian Project Leader, giving a Debian status update}
 \end{center}
 \vspace{-1.5em}%
 \end{wrapfigure}
@@ -406,7 +406,7 @@
 widen our community, and for our sponsors to increase their visibility. A job
 fair (see below) will be arranged as well, in case you are looking to recruit!
 
-\subsection{Live World-wide Video Streaming}
+\subsection{Live World-wide Video Streaming and Archiving}
 
 A dedicated team of volunteers with years of experience with video coverage will
 record all previously scheduled sessions at DebConf, to be streamed live via the Internet. This
@@ -414,8 +414,8 @@
 
 % FIXME: Add url to previous year's videos?
 
-All videos are also available after the conference for the further benefit of
-the community. All this is free of charge to viewers. \textbf{We thank our
+All videos are also archived after the conference for the long-term benefit of
+the community.  This media library already contains videos from every DebConf since 2005.  All this is free of charge to viewers. \textbf{We thank our
 Platinum and Gold sponsors by inserting their logos into the video streams.}
 
 \subsection{DebCamp: Team Sprints}
@@ -488,6 +488,8 @@
 
 \subsection{Sponsorship Levels}
 
+\vspace{-0.25cm}
+
 %TODO we should add a statement about ordering within each level so that all
 %sponsors know the rules from the start.
 \begin{table}[htb!]
@@ -511,7 +513,7 @@
     < \${2,000} & \${2,000} & \${5,000} & \${10,000} & \${20,000} \\
     Logo on sponsor webpage
     & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ \\
-    Access to swag bags
+    Provide materials for conference bags
     & & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ \\
     Logo on t-shirts and conference bags &
     & & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ \\
@@ -529,6 +531,8 @@
 }
 \end{table}
 
+\vspace{-0.25cm}
+
 \begin{center}
 \includegraphics[width=\linewidth]{img/debconf-shirt.jpg}
 \footnotesize \emph{Participants with T-Shirts from past DebConfs}
@@ -542,7 +546,7 @@
 contributors, derivative developers, upstream authors and other community
 members.}
 
-As it has become traditional, there will be a job fair during DebConf. As a
+As has become our tradition, we will host a job fair during DebConf. As a
 Platinum, Gold, or Silver sponsor, you can use this opportunity to
 \textbf{present yourself as an employer and engage in direct dialog with
 potential job candidates.}