Re: DPN 2015/08 frozen. Please review and translate.
Donald Norwood wrote:
> We just finished the last bits of the new issue of DPN to be released on
> Thursday, October 22, around 19:45 UTC.
>
> We would very much appreciate reviews and translations.
>
> Instructions are available on the wiki:
> http://wiki.debian.org/ProjectNews
I don't see anything very much like instructions for how to do reviews
and translations. There is, for instance, no mention of the fact that
it now seems to require familiarity with git; and with the new
multi-file setup it's not obvious what's even editable.
> The last updated version is available on the publicity
> Git repository, even via HTTP:
>
> http://anonscm.debian.org/cgit/publicity/dpn.git/tree/en/2015/08/index.wml
>
> If you're willing to contribute to the redaction of the next issue,
> don't hesitate, and join #debian-publicity IRC channel or send a message
> to debian-publicity@lists.debian.org.
"git commit; git push" just gives me an error message, but here's a
diff.
--
JBR with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package
diff --git a/IDEAS b/IDEAS
index d09c880..5a35bf2 100644
--- a/IDEAS
+++ b/IDEAS
@@ -24,11 +24,11 @@ News:
https://lists.debian.org/msgid-search/87a8te4ccq.fsf@gkar.ganneff.de
menu system decision
https://lists.debian.org/msgid-search/20150904033414.GD3605@qor.donarmstring.com
- German-written Debian Package Management Book
+ Debian Package Management book (in German)
http://noone.org/blog/English/Computer/Debian/German-written%20Debian%20Package%20Management%20Book.futile
Pump.io/Microblogging
-[DONE-PUMPIO] Reproducable builds Make Software Trustworthy Again
+[DONE-PUMPIO] Reproducible builds Make Software Trustworthy Again
http://motherboard.vice.com/read/how-debian-is-trying-to-shut-down-the-cia-and-make-software-trustworthy-again
[DONE-PUMPIO] MATE 1.10 in unstable
http://sunweavers.net/blog/node/19
@@ -38,7 +38,7 @@ Reports:
http://ianmurdock.com/post/how-i-came-to-find-linux/
Summary of the ARM ports BoF at DC15 Steve McIntyre
https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel/2015/09/msg00233.html
- Minutes from the "32bit architectures in Debian"-bof Andreas Barth
+ Minutes from the "32bit architectures in Debian"-BoF Andreas Barth
https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel/2015/08/msg00331.html
My Activities/LTS:
diff --git a/drafts/callforhelp_translators.txt b/drafts/callforhelp_translators.txt
index 31e313a..0394c9a 100644
--- a/drafts/callforhelp_translators.txt
+++ b/drafts/callforhelp_translators.txt
@@ -21,18 +21,18 @@ RFR-DPN:
<toc-add-entry name="help">Call for help: Translators and reviewers needed!</toc-add-entry>
<p>Help us make Debian (the software, the community) speak your language!
-Less than an hour and even just a couple of minutes every once in a while
-can make a difference. </p>
+Less than an hour every once in a while - even just a couple of
+minutes - can make a difference. </p>
-<p>If you speak a language different than English, you can join
-your language team and contribute to Debian with translations
+<p>If you speak a language other than English, you can join the team for
+your language and contribute to Debian with translations
and reviews of other people's translations. </p>
-<p>Reviewing translations made by other contributors is particularly needed
+<p>Reviewing translations by other contributors is particularly needed
(to ensure their quality) and easy (no technical skills needed, just language skills).
</p>
-<p>More information and contact details in
+<p>More information and contact details in the
<a href="https://wiki.debian.org/Teams/Welcome/Translators";>Welcome Translators</a> wiki page.
</p>
@@ -41,8 +41,8 @@ RFR-PUMPIO:
TITLE: Translators and reviewers needed!
BODY:
Help us make Debian (the software, the community) speak your language!
-Less than an hour and even just a couple of minutes every once in a while
-can make a difference. [Want to try?](https://wiki.debian.org/Teams/Welcome/Translators)
+Less than an hour every once in a while - even just a couple of
+minutes - can make a difference. [Want to try?](https://wiki.debian.org/Teams/Welcome/Translators)
RFR-MICROBLOG:
diff --git a/drafts/debconf15_attendeeimpressions.txt b/drafts/debconf15_attendeeimpressions.txt
index 539d17e..c449a8d 100644
--- a/drafts/debconf15_attendeeimpressions.txt
+++ b/drafts/debconf15_attendeeimpressions.txt
@@ -25,9 +25,9 @@ DPN-RFR:
<p>The DebConf Team is working in writing the
<a href="https://wiki.debconf.org/wiki/DebConf15/FinalReport";>DebConf15
-Final Report</a>, and some sections are almost ready, content-wise, for example
+Final Report</a>, and some sections are almost ready, content-wise. For example,
<a href="https://wiki.debconf.org/wiki/DebConf15/FinalReport/InNumbers";>DebConf15 in Numbers</a>
-(contact the DebConf Team if you could help transforming the stats into nice infographics) and the
+(contact the DebConf Team if you could help with transforming the stats into nice infographics) and the
<a href="https://wiki.debconf.org/wiki/DebConf15/FinalReport/AttendeeImpressions";>Attendee Impressions</a>
-(a comprenhensive list of links of blogposts about DebConf15, including some quotes).
+(a comprehensive list of links to blogposts about DebConf15, including some quotes).
</p>
diff --git a/drafts/freedombox.txt b/drafts/freedombox.txt
index 34f7dcd..b02060e 100644
--- a/drafts/freedombox.txt
+++ b/drafts/freedombox.txt
@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
IDEA:
-Freedombox Hackathon in NYC on October 31st
+Freedombox Hackathon in NYC on October 31
http://lists.alioth.debian.org/pipermail/freedombox-discuss/2015-September/006874.html
STATUS: [RFR](larjona)
@@ -16,11 +16,11 @@ RFR-DPN:
<p><b>Upcoming Events</b></p>
-<p><b>FreedomBox Halloween Hack-a-thon</b></p>
+<p><b>FreedomBox Halloween Hackathon</b></p>
<p>The FreedomBox Foundation is hosting a
<a href="http://lists.alioth.debian.org/pipermail/freedombox-discuss/2015-September/006874.html";>
-Halloween hack-a-thon</a> on Saturday October 31st in New York City.
+Halloween Hackathon</a> on Saturday October 31 in New York City.
New and existing contributors will be getting together to work on
<a href="https://wiki.debian.org/FreedomBox/";>FreedomBox</a>, the
Debian-based privacy-respecting self-hosting software suite and wireless
@@ -28,13 +28,13 @@ router.</p>
RFR-PUMPIO:
-TITLE: FreedomBox Halloween Hack-a-thon
+TITLE: FreedomBox Halloween Hackathon
BODY:
-The FreedomBox Foundation is hosting a [Halloween hack-a-thon](http://lists.alioth.debian.org/pipermail/freedombox-discuss/2015-September/006874.html) on Saturday October 31st in New York City.
-New and existing contributors will be getting together to work on
+The FreedomBox Foundation is hosting a [Halloween Hackathon](http://lists.alioth.debian.org/pipermail/freedombox-discuss/2015-September/006874.html) on Saturday October 31 in New York City.
+New and existing contributors will be getting together to work on
[FreedomBox](https://wiki.debian.org/FreedomBox/), the
Debian-based privacy-respecting self-hosting software suite and wireless
router.
RFR-MICROBLOG:
-#FreedomBox #Halloween #Hackathon next October 31st in #NYC http://lists.alioth.debian.org/pipermail/freedombox-discuss/2015-September/006874.html
+#FreedomBox #Halloween #Hackathon next October 31 in #NYC http://lists.alioth.debian.org/pipermail/freedombox-discuss/2015-September/006874.html
diff --git a/drafts/lwn.txt b/drafts/lwn.txt
index 5767217..b920a93 100644
--- a/drafts/lwn.txt
+++ b/drafts/lwn.txt
@@ -27,11 +27,11 @@ DPN-RFR:
Nathan Willis from Linux Weekly News attended DebConf15
and wrote eight articles about topics covered in the conference:
-"Copyright assignment and license enforcement for Debian" ,
+"Copyright assignment and license enforcement for Debian",
"Debian and binary firmware blobs",
"Advances in Debian's package manager",
"Debsources as a platform",
-"Bringing Git workflows to Debian with dgit"
+"Bringing Git workflows to Debian with dgit",
"Automating architecture bootstrapping in Debian",
"How Debian managed the systemd transition", and
"A status update on Debian's reproducible builds". All these articles
@@ -42,11 +42,11 @@ Weekly News website</a>.</p>
PUMPIO-RFR:
Title: DebConf15 Coverage in Linux Weekly News
-All 8 articles from the @lwnnet@identi.ca DebConf15 coverage by @n8@identi.ca
-are now publically available, check them out! http://lwn.net/Archives/ConferenceByYear/#2015-DebConf
+All eight articles from the @lwnnet@identi.ca DebConf15 coverage by @n8@identi.ca
+are now publicly available, check them out! http://lwn.net/Archives/ConferenceByYear/#2015-DebConf
MICROBLOG-RFR:
-All 8 articles from the @lwnnet #debconf15 coverage by @n8willis are now publically available, check them out! http://lwn.net/Archives/ConferenceByYear/#2015-DebConf
+All 8 articles from the @lwnnet #debconf15 coverage by @n8willis are now publicly available, check them out! http://lwn.net/Archives/ConferenceByYear/#2015-DebConf
COMMENTS:
Pump.io and microblog copied from @debconf's twitter. Nathan Willis and LWN are in identi.ca, make the proper links to their accounts in pump.io
diff --git a/drafts/template.txt b/drafts/template.txt
index 5585675..9e94167 100644
--- a/drafts/template.txt
+++ b/drafts/template.txt
@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@ BITS: SKIP
# list of our different media, assigning one proposal: MUST, SHOULD, COULD, SKIP for each media
-# if another person reviews this file, she can ACK(nickname) or modify (then, add comment at the end)
+# others who review this file can ACK(nickname) or modify (then, add comment at the end)
COMMENTS:
diff --git a/en/2015/08/index.wml b/en/2015/08/index.wml
index 6646c48..6f98fe7 100644
--- a/en/2015/08/index.wml
+++ b/en/2015/08/index.wml
@@ -21,16 +21,16 @@
some of the content around, introduced new sections, and moved some content
onto the <a href="https://bits.debian.org/";>Bits from Debian</a> Blog.</p>
-<p>Bits from Debian will showcase new packages and interviews, some announcements,
+<p>Bits from Debian will showcase new packages and interviews, plus some announcements,
and is where we will welcome new DDs.</p>
-<p>We are planning to send more often short news via our social network account.
+<p>We are planning to send more short news items via our social network account.
Please be sure to follow us on: <a href="https://identi.ca/debian";>identi.ca/debian</a>
(or fall back to the non-official-mirrors in other social networks).</p>
<p>One of the major changes is the removal of the DSA security advisories from
-the newsletter, Debian's Security Team releases current advisories on a daily
-basis: <a href="$(HOME)/security/2015/dsa-">Security Advisories 2015</a>,
+the newsletter. Debian's Security Team releases current advisories on a daily
+basis (<a href="$(HOME)/security/2015/dsa-">Security Advisories 2015</a>), so
please read them carefully and take the proper measures.</p>
<p>If you need to be kept up to date about security advisories released by the
@@ -65,15 +65,15 @@ Menu System and towards the common Freedesktop Desktop Entry Specification, and
that menu information for applications should not be duplicated in two different
formats.</p>
-<p>Christian Perrier <a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel-announce/2015/09/msg00008.html";>announces</a> the traditional bug guessing contest for when
+<p>Christian Perrier <a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel-announce/2015/09/msg00008.html";>announced</a> the traditional bug guessing contest for when
bugs #900000 and #1000000 will be reported.
Chris Lamb reported <a href="https://bugs.debian.org/800000";>Bug #800000</a> on vdr-plugin-prefermenu.</p>
<p>The Debian Website Team has reviewed and updated the information in the
-website section <a href="https:https://www.debian.org/users/#org";>Who's using Debian - Organizations</a>.
-Many new and old users in the business world have explained how are their Debian
-deployments in this year 2015. Have a look!
+website section <a href="https:https://www.debian.org/users/#org";>Who's using Debian - Organisations</a>.
+Many new and old users in the business world have explained how they
+are deploying Debian in the year 2015. Have a look!
You can still <a href="https://www.debian.org/users/#submissions";>submit new entries/info</a>
or <a href="https://wiki.debian.org/WhoUsesDebian";>join the <q>Who's using
@@ -81,32 +81,34 @@ Debian</q> review efforts</a>, now in the Education subsection.</p>
<p>The DebConf Team is working on writing the
<a href="https://wiki.debconf.org/wiki/DebConf15/FinalReport";>DebConf15
-Final Report</a>, and some sections are almost ready, content-wise, for example
+Final Report</a>, and some sections are almost ready, content-wise; for example
<a href="https://wiki.debconf.org/wiki/DebConf15/FinalReport/InNumbers";>DebConf15 in Numbers</a>
-(contact the DebConf Team if you could help transforming the stats into nice infographics) and the
+(contact the DebConf Team if you could help with transforming the stats into nice infographics) and the
<a href="https://wiki.debconf.org/wiki/DebConf15/FinalReport/AttendeeImpressions";>Attendee Impressions</a>
(a comprehensive list of links of blogposts about DebConf15, including some quotes).</p>
<p>Look how the time has flown! <a href="http://www.df7cb.de/blog/2015/10_Years_Debian_Developer.html";>Christoph Berg</a> recounts 10 years as a Debian Developer and <a href="http://dirk.eddelbuettel.com/blog/2015/09/08/#it_was_twenty_years_ago";>Dirk Eddelbuettel</a> celebrates 20 years of Debian Contributions.</p>
<p>The delegations for the Publicity Team have been <a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel-announce/2015/09/msg00007.html";>updated</a> and the team
-<a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-publicity/2015/08/msg00032.html";>restructured</a>. The new Publicity Team will handle social media, blog, press
+<a
+href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-publicity/2015/08/msg00032.html";>restructured</a>.
+The new Publicity Team will handle social media, blogging, press
releases, announcements, the DPN, and Debian Press functions. </p>
<p><b>Upcoming Events</b></p>
-<p>FreedomBox Halloween Hack-a-thon</p>
+<p>FreedomBox Halloween Hackathon</p>
<p>The FreedomBox Foundation is hosting a
<a href="http://lists.alioth.debian.org/pipermail/freedombox-discuss/2015-September/006874.html";>
-Halloween hack-a-thon</a> on Saturday October 31st in New York City.
+Halloween Hackathon</a> on Saturday October 31 in New York City.
New and existing contributors will be getting together to work on
<a href="https://wiki.debian.org/FreedomBox/";>FreedomBox</a>, the
Debian-based privacy-respecting self-hosting software suite and wireless
router.</p>
<p>You can find more information about Debian-related events and talks
-on the <a href="$(HOME)/events">events section</a> of the Debian web site.
+on the <a href="$(HOME)/events">events section</a> of the Debian website.
</p>
## Items pulled from the Timeline http://timeline.debian.net
@@ -136,14 +138,14 @@ on the <a href="$(HOME)/events">events section</a> of the Debian web site.
<toc-add-entry name="help">Calls for help!</toc-add-entry>
-<p><b> Translators and reviewers needed!</b></p>
+<p><b>Translators and reviewers needed!</b></p>
<p>Help us make Debian (the software, the community) speak your language!
-Less than an hour and even just a couple of minutes every once in a while
-can make a difference. </p>
+Less than an hour every once in a while - even just a couple of
+minutes - can make a difference. </p>
-<p>If you speak a language different than English, you can join
-your language team and contribute to Debian with translations
+<p>If you speak a language other than English, you can join the team for
+your language and contribute to Debian with translations
and reviews of other people's translations. </p>
<p>Reviewing translations made by other contributors is particularly needed
@@ -178,12 +180,12 @@ There are <a href="http://bugs.debian.org/cgi-bin/pkgreport.cgi?tag=newcomer";>15
<p>
<p><b>Tips and Tricks</b></p>
-<p>Several members of the Debian community shared some tips: François Marier
-shows <a href="http://feeding.cloud.geek.nz/posts/setting-up-a-network-scanner-using-sane/";>how to set up a network scanner using SANE.</a>
-Norbert Preining demonstrates <a href="http://www.preining.info/blog/2015/09/rename-offlineimap-folder/";>How to rename a local Offline IMAP mangaged folder</a>.
-Sven Hoeexter discusses to <a href="https://sven.stormbind.net/blog/posts/misc_1960_subject_alternative_names/";>adding multiple SubjectAlternativeNames on one certificate</a>,
+<p>Several members of the Debian community shared tips: François Marier
+shows <a href="http://feeding.cloud.geek.nz/posts/setting-up-a-network-scanner-using-sane/";>how to set up a network scanner using SANE</a>,
+Norbert Preining demonstrates <a href="http://www.preining.info/blog/2015/09/rename-offlineimap-folder/";>how to rename a local Offline IMAP mangaged folder</a>.
+Sven Hoeexter discusses <a href="https://sven.stormbind.net/blog/posts/misc_1960_subject_alternative_names/";>adding multiple SubjectAlternativeNames on one certificate</a>,
and <a href="https://sven.stormbind.net/blog/posts/misc_wildcard_subject_alternative_names/";>wildcard SubjectAlternativeNames</a>.
-Luca Falavigna shares <a href="https://dktrkranz.wordpress.com/2015/09/02/resource-control-with-systemd/";>Resource control with systemd</a>.
+Luca Falavigna shares <a href="https://dktrkranz.wordpress.com/2015/09/02/resource-control-with-systemd/";>resource control with systemd</a>.
</p>
<p>Having issues with WordPress 4.3 getting slow? You might need an update as
@@ -202,37 +204,37 @@ Luca Falavigna shares <a href="https://dktrkranz.wordpress.com/2015/09/02/resour
<toc-add-entry name="reports">Reports</toc-add-entry>
<p>
-The <q>ian</q> in Debian, Ian Murdock pens <q><a href="http://ianmurdock.com/post/how-i-came-to-find-linux/";>How I came to find Linux</a></q> sharing how a
-9 year olds start with computer video games and later programming came to make
-his own contribution to the growing community -and a new distribution called
+The <q>ian</q> in Debian, Ian Murdock, penned <q><a href="http://ianmurdock.com/post/how-i-came-to-find-linux/";>How I came to find Linux</a></q> sharing how a
+from starting as a nine-year-old with computer video games and later programming he came to make
+his own contribution to the growing community - and a new distribution called
<a href="https://www.debian.org/";>Debian</a>.</p>
-<p>Steve McIntyre posted a <a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel/2015/09/msg00233.html";>summary of the ARM ports BOF at DebConf15</a>. He details
-and asks questions about armel in Stretch and Debian's sole support of older
+<p>Steve McIntyre posted a <a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel/2015/09/msg00233.html";>summary of the ARM ports BOF at DebConf15</a>. He details
+and asks questions about armel in Stretch and Debian's sole support of older
ARM hardware, armhf cross distribution and kernel efforts, and arm64, the most
- recent port shipped with Jessie. Steve also shares information about Buildds
+ recent port shipped with Jessie. Steve also shares information about buildds
and hardware, scientific software, and porting access. </p>
<p>Andreas Barth posted <a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel/2015/08/msg00331.html";>Minutes from the 32bit architectures in Debian BOF</a>. His
- report details 32 bit architectures in Debian and discussions over how to
- compile and link with more memory, and issues specific to i386 such as new 32 bit
+ report details 32-bit architectures in Debian and discussions over how to
+ compile and link with more memory, and issues specific to i386 such as new 32-bit
hardware, excluding architectures on packages, and powerpc.</p>
<p>Gregor Herrmann posted a <a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-project/2015/09/msg00008.html";>Report from the Debian Perl Rolling Sprint at DebCamp15</a>.
-The sprint covered workflow patches in git, git-debcherry, and held several
+The sprint covered workflow patches in git (especially git-debcherry), and held several
discussions on minor issues in scripts, new tooling to import changes, and
-worked on several individual packages. They were also able to do bug triaging,
+work on several individual packages. They were also able to do bug triaging,
repository cleanup, and update examples of pkg-perl-tools. During DebCamp and
-Debconf 189 packages were uploaded with 19 bugs closed.</p>
+DebConf, 189 packages were uploaded with 19 bugs closed.</p>
-<p>Niels Thykier <a href="https://nthykier.wordpress.com/2015/09/05/the-gcc-5-transition-is-coming-to-testing-tonight/";>reported</a> on the GCC-5/libstdc++ <a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel-announce/2015/08/msg00000.html";>transition</a> and provided a list of
+<p>Niels Thykier <a href="https://nthykier.wordpress.com/2015/09/05/the-gcc-5-transition-is-coming-to-testing-tonight/";>reported</a> on the GCC-5/libstdc++ <a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel-announce/2015/08/msg00000.html";>transition</a> and provided a list of
<a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel/2015/09/msg00148.html";>packages that will be affected</a>.
-Neils also <a href="https://nthykier.wordpress.com/2015/09/05/i-accidentially-dak/";>fixed</a> then unbroke <a href="https://wiki.debian.org/DakHowTo";>Dak</a> which now has it's auto-decrufter and
+Neils also <a href="https://nthykier.wordpress.com/2015/09/05/i-accidentially-dak/";>fixed</a> then unbroke <a href="https://wiki.debian.org/DakHowTo";>Dak</a> which now has its auto-decrufter and
generate-releases code patched.</p>
-<p>Guido Günther posted the <a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel-announce/2015/09/msg00009.html";>Bits from the 9th Debian Groupware Meeting</a>. The
-attendees updated several packages among them Icedove, calendar-exchange,
+<p>Guido Günther posted the <a href="https://lists.debian.org/debian-devel-announce/2015/09/msg00009.html";>Bits from the 9th Debian Groupware Meeting</a>. The
+attendees updated several packages, among them Icedove, calendar-exchange,
and Azrafa/Giraffe. The team also addressed security and licensing issues and
added integration of zarafa-webapp with Apache 2.4.
@@ -244,12 +246,12 @@ new version of Hercules, a z/Architecture emulator. </p>
<p><b>LTS status/updates</b></p>
<p>
Long Term Support for Squeeze reported 25 hours of paid support with
-<a href="http://honk.sigxcpu.org/con/Debian_work_in_August_2015.html";>Guido Günther</a> fixing a regression in pykerberors, working with Craig Small, who
-updated wordpress, and the CVE triaging of 9 CVEs.
+<a href="http://honk.sigxcpu.org/con/Debian_work_in_August_2015.html";>Guido Günther</a> fixing a regression in pykerberors, working with Craig Small, who
+updated wordpress, as well as the CVE triaging of 9 CVEs.
-<a href="http://blog.alteholz.eu/2015/09/my-debian-activities-in-august-2015/";>Thorsten Alteholz</a> prepared an upload of php5 for testing and uploaded
+<a href="http://blog.alteholz.eu/2015/09/my-debian-activities-in-august-2015/";>Thorsten Alteholz</a> prepared an upload of php5 for testing and uploaded
security updates for opensaml2, wesnoth-1.8, and xmltooling among others. He
-also did frontdesk work answering questions on IRC channel and researching priority
+also did frontdesk work answering questions on IRC and researching priority
CVEs.
<a href="https://skitterman.wordpress.com/2015/09/06/debian-lts-work-august-2015/";>Scott Kitterman</a> released a fix for screen and reviewed CVEs for items that were
@@ -262,28 +264,27 @@ applicable to squeeze-lts.
<p>Reproducible Builds <a href="https://people.debian.org/~lunar/blog/posts/";>weekly reports</a> on package and toolchain fixes in Stretch cycle:</p>
<ul>
-<li><a href="https://people.debian.org/~lunar/blog/posts/reproducible_builds_stretch_week_18/";>Week 18</a> reports the 115 packages moved to reproducible state, 142 packages
-reviewed and a total of 259 packages updated. 37 packages have been identified as failing to build from source.</li>
+<li><a href="https://people.debian.org/~lunar/blog/posts/reproducible_builds_stretch_week_18/";>Week 18</a> reports 115 packages moved to reproducible state, 142 packages
+reviewed, and a total of 259 packages updated. 37 packages have been identified as failing to build from source.</li>
<li><a href="https://people.debian.org/~lunar/blog/posts/reproducible_builds_stretch_week_19/";>Week 19</a> reports 63 packages moved to reproducible state with 235 packages
-reviewed and a total of 277 packages updated. 29 packages have been identified as failing to build from source.</li>
+reviewed, and a total of 277 packages updated. 29 packages have been identified as failing to build from source.</li>
-<li><a href="https://people.debian.org/~lunar/blog/posts/reproducible_builds_stretch_week_20/";>Week 20</a> reports 39 packages moved to reproducible state with 16 packages
-reviewed and a total of 55 packages updated. 23 packages have been identified as failing to build from source.</li>
+<li><a href="https://people.debian.org/~lunar/blog/posts/reproducible_builds_stretch_week_20/";>Week 20</a> reports 39 packages moved to reproducible state with 16 packages
+reviewed, and a total of 55 packages updated. 23 packages have been identified as failing to build from source.</li>
<li><a href="https://people.debian.org/~lunar/blog/posts/reproducible_builds_stretch_week_21/";>Week 21</a> reports 42 packages moved to reproducible state with 45 packages
-reviewed and a total of 62 packages updated. 67 packages have been identified as failing to build from source.</li>
+reviewed, and a total of 62 packages updated. 67 packages have been identified as failing to build from source.</li>
-<li><a href="https://people.debian.org/~lunar/blog/posts/reproducible_builds_stretch_week_22/";>Week 22</a> reports 39 packages moved to reproducible state with 53 packages
-reviewed and a total of 13 packages updated. 46 packages have been identified as failing to build from source.</li>
+<li><a href="https://people.debian.org/~lunar/blog/posts/reproducible_builds_stretch_week_22/";>Week 22</a> reports 39 packages moved to reproducible state with 53 packages
+reviewed, and a total of 13 packages updated. 46 packages have been identified as failing to build from source.</li>
<li><a href="https://people.debian.org/~lunar/blog/posts/reproducible_builds_stretch_week_23/";>Week 23</a> reports 17 packages moved to reproducible state with 119 packages
reviewed and a total of 45 packages updated. 16 packages have been identified as failing to build from source.</li></ul>
<p><b>RC Bugs update</b></p>
-<p>Gregor Herrmann <a href="http://info.comodo.priv.at/blog/rc_bugs_2015_31_37.html
-">reported</a> on 13 RC bugs worked on in September.</p>
+<p>Gregor Herrmann <a href="http://info.comodo.priv.at/blog/rc_bugs_2015_31_37.html";>reported</a> on 13 RC bugs worked on in September.</p>
<toc-add-entry name="outside">Outside News</toc-add-entry>
diff --git a/en/dpntemplate_2.wml b/en/dpntemplate_2.wml
index 774ae1c..c97f2b5 100644
--- a/en/dpntemplate_2.wml
+++ b/en/dpntemplate_2.wml
@@ -21,21 +21,21 @@
some of the content around, introduced new sections, and lastly are moving some
content onto the <a href="https://bits.debian.org/";>Bits from Debian</a> Blog.
-<p>Bits from Debian will showcase new packages, welcome new DDs, interviews,
-some announcements, and other dynamic information.</p>
+<p>Bits from Debian will showcase new packages and interviews, plus some announcements,
+and is where we will welcome new DDs.</p>
-<p>We are planning to send short news more often via our social network account.
+<p>We are planning to send short news items more often via our social network account.
Please be sure to follow us on: <a href="https://identi.ca/debian";>identi.ca/debian</a>
(or fall back to the non-official-mirrors in other social networks).</p>
<ul>
-<li>foo can be now be found <a href="link/">link xyz</a></li>
-<li>foo can be now be found <a href="link/">link xyz</a></li>
+<li>foo can be now be found at <a href="link/">link xyz</a></li>
+<li>foo can be now be found at <a href="link/">link xyz</a></li>
</ul>
<p>One of the major changes is the removal of the DSA security advisories from
-the newsletter, Debian's Security Team releases current advisories on a daily
-basis: <a href="$(HOME)/security/2015/dsa-">Security Advisories 2015</a>,
+the newsletter. Debian's Security Team releases current advisories on a daily
+basis (<a href="$(HOME)/security/2015/dsa-">Security Advisories 2015</a>), so
please read them carefully and take the proper measures.</p>
<p>If you need to be kept up to date about security advisories released by the
@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@ From now on, you will find:
<li>links to packages needing help, </li>
<li>links to bug reports tagged "newcomer"</li>
<li>calls for help from teams in coordination with the Welcome Team,
-tailored for fist-time contributors.</p>
+tailored for first-time contributors.</p>
## Start of the actual news
@@ -65,7 +65,7 @@ tailored for fist-time contributors.</p>
<li><a href="$(HOME)/events/">xyz</a></li>
<p>You can find more information about Debian-related events and talks
-on the <a href="$(HOME)/events">events section</a> of the Debian web site.
+on the <a href="$(HOME)/events">events section</a> of the Debian website.
</p>
## Items pulled from the Timeline http://timeline.debian.net
@@ -90,8 +90,6 @@ X,XXX people and XX teams are listed on the <a href="https://contributors.debian
## Teams needing help
## $Link to the email from $Team requesting help
-<p>The Foo Team is requesting help for:</p>
-
<p>The foo team is requesting help with:</p>
<p>Packages needing help:</p>
@@ -107,11 +105,11 @@ X,XXX people and XX teams are listed on the <a href="https://contributors.debian
## check http://bugs.debian.org/cgi-bin/pkgreport.cgi?tag=newcomer
-Debain has a newcomer bug tag used to indicate bugs which are suitable for new
+Debian has a newcomer bug tag used to indicate bugs which are suitable for new
contributors to use as an entry point to working on specific packages.
-There are <a href="http://bugs.debian.org/cgi-bin/pkgreport.cgi?tag=newcomer";>158</a> newcomer bugs are available.
-
+There are <a href="http://bugs.debian.org/cgi-bin/pkgreport.cgi?tag=newcomer";>158</a>
+newcomer bugs available.
<toc-add-entry name="namesuggestionneeded">More than just code</toc-add-entry>
diff --git a/en/index.wml-template b/en/index.wml-template
index bbe4fae..d09b1c7 100644
--- a/en/index.wml-template
+++ b/en/index.wml-template
@@ -28,13 +28,14 @@ More details about foo.
<toc-add-entry name="WDYD">DPN asks, What do you do?</toc-add-entry>
<p>
- <a href="https://www.debian.org/";>Debian</a> is a large and global community of a lot of small actors, projects, and
-teams. This month as part of a special feature we'd like to share with you
-something about a project or a team that is working in Debian that you
-may not be aware of.
+<a href="https://www.debian.org/";>Debian</a> is a large global
+community made up of many individuals, teams, and projects. This month
+as part of a special feature we'd like to share with you something
+about a project or a team that is working in Debian that you may not
+be aware of.
</p>
<p>
- We reached out to the XXX team with the question: <q>What do you do?</q>
+We reached out to the XXX team with the question: <q>What do you do?</q>
</p>
<p>
XXX responds:
diff --git a/en/reviseddpn.wml b/en/reviseddpn.wml
index cc852e3..84878bb 100644
--- a/en/reviseddpn.wml
+++ b/en/reviseddpn.wml
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
## substitute XXX with the number (expressed in letter) of the issue.
-## please note that the var issue is not automagically localized, so
+## please note that the var issue is not automagically localised, so
## translators need to put it directly in their language!
## example: <intro issue="fourth" />
@@ -17,7 +17,7 @@
<p>
-We hope that you enjoy our first new revied issue of the DPN. We have shifted
+We hope that you enjoy our first new revised issue of the DPN. We have shifted
some of the content around, introduced new sections...social media...
<ul>
<li>foo can be now be found <a href="link/">link xyz</a></li>
@@ -25,8 +25,8 @@ some of the content around, introduced new sections...social media...
<li>foo can be now be found <a href="link/">link xyz</a></li>
<p>One of the major changes is the removal of the DSA security advisories from
-the newsletter, Debian's Security Team releases current advisories on a daily
-basis: <a href="$(HOME)/security/2015/dsa-">Security Advisories 2015</a>,
+the newsletter. Debian's Security Team releases current advisories on a daily
+basis (<a href="$(HOME)/security/2015/dsa-">Security Advisories 2015</a>), so
please read them carefully and take the proper measures.</p>
<p>If you need to be kept up to date about security advisories released by the
@@ -101,8 +101,6 @@ X,XXX people and XX teams are listed on the <a href="https://contributors.debian
##Teams needing help
### $Link to email from $Team requesting help
-<p>The Foo Team is requesting help for:</p>
-
<p>The foo team is requesting help with:</p>
<p>Packages needing help:</p>
@@ -116,12 +114,13 @@ X,XXX people and XX teams are listed on the <a href="https://contributors.debian
rfa="XXX" />
<p>Newcomer bugs</p>
-## link to annocement of the newcomer tag?
+## link to announcement of the newcomer tag?
## check http://bugs.debian.org/cgi-bin/pkgreport.cgi?tag=newcomer
-Debain has a newcomer bug tag used to indicate bugs which are suitable for new
+Debian has a newcomer bug tag used to indicate bugs which are suitable for new
contributors to use as an entry point to working on specific packages.
-There are <a href="http://bugs.debian.org/cgi-bin/pkgreport.cgi?tag=newcomer";>158</a> newcomer bugs are available
+There are <a href="http://bugs.debian.org/cgi-bin/pkgreport.cgi?tag=newcomer";>158</a> newcomer bugs available
+
<toc-add-entry name="namesuggestionneeded">More than just code</toc-add-entry>
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