Hi, I found a couple of other changes that you might want to make. The ones where there's anything to say are: * I think that the rewording I came up with for the Mini-DebConf is simpler and more idiomatic. I'm not sure whether the "that is" should stay or go - a matter of taste, I think. * In English, we say stuff like "People stand on their feet". If I remember correctly, it's the opposite in German? * Personal irritation: You're giving instructions on how people who would like further information can get it. I can't see why we should say "please" there! :-) Otherwise, looks good to me. diff -u and wdiff output based on the patch that Justin sent already attached. Rupert
--- 2010-04-07-minidebconf-germany.wml 2010-04-06 21:53:47.000000000 +0100 +++ 2010-04-07-minidebconf-germany.wml.new 2010-04-06 21:46:45.000000000 +0100 @@ -13,14 +13,14 @@ <p>The program of the two day Conference will offer talks, workshops and panel discussion for an audience ranging from Debian Developers and Maintainers to contributors, users and otherwise interested persons. -In parallel to the conference, in a neighbouring <i>hacking area</i> a Bug +In parallel to the conference, in a neighbouring <i>hacking area</i>, a Bug Squashing Party will be held, where time will be spent on fixing remaining release critical bugs, running upgrade tests and working on the release notes for the upcoming release, Debian 6.0 <q>Squeeze</q>.</p> <p>No registration is necessary to attend the Debian Mini Conference, but a ticket for the LinuxTag (available upon request) is needed. The -Conference is planed via <a +Conference is being planned via <a href="http://wiki.debconf.org/wiki/Miniconf-LT-Berlin/2010";>the DebConf Wiki</a>.</p> @@ -31,19 +31,19 @@ free, community project. Since then the project has grown to be one of the largest and most influential open source projects. Over three thousand volunteers from all over the world work together to create and -maintain Debian software. Translated into over 30 languages, and +maintain Debian software. Translated into over 30 languages and supporting a huge range of computer types, Debian calls itself the <q>universal operating system</q>.</p> <h2>About Mini-DebConf</h2> -<p>A Mini-DebConf is a Debian Project developer conference, which is -smaller in the number of attendees compared to the full DebConf +<p>A Mini-DebConf is a Debian Project developer conference, which has +fewer attendees than the full DebConf that is held annually by the Debian project. It still features a full schedule of technical, social and policy talks, and thus a Mini-DebConf provides an opportunity for developers, contributors and other interested people -to meet in person and work together closely. Just like its bigger +to meet in person and work together closely. Just like their bigger counterpart, the regular DebConf, Mini-DebConfs have taken place many times since 2000 in locations all over the world: Europe, America, Asia and Australia.</p> @@ -51,6 +51,6 @@ <h2>Contact Information</h2> -<p>For further information, please visit the Debian web pages at +<p>For further information, visit the Debian web pages at <a href="http://www.debian.org/";>www.debian.org</a> or send mail to <<a href="mailto:press@debian.org";>press@debian.org</a>>.
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