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Re: Latest DPN issue corrections.



Hi,

I found a couple of other changes that you might want to make. The ones
where there's anything to say are:

* I think that the rewording I came up with for the Mini-DebConf is
  simpler and more idiomatic. I'm not sure whether the "that is" should
  stay or go - a matter of taste, I think.

* In English, we say stuff like "People stand on their feet". If I
  remember correctly, it's the opposite in German?

* Personal irritation: You're giving instructions on how people who
  would like further information can get it. I can't see why we should
  say "please" there! :-)

Otherwise, looks good to me. diff -u and wdiff output based on the patch
that Justin sent already attached.

Rupert

--- 2010-04-07-minidebconf-germany.wml	2010-04-06 21:53:47.000000000 +0100
+++ 2010-04-07-minidebconf-germany.wml.new	2010-04-06 21:46:45.000000000 +0100
@@ -13,14 +13,14 @@
 <p>The program of the two day Conference will offer talks, workshops and
 panel discussion for an audience ranging from Debian Developers and
 Maintainers to contributors, users and otherwise interested persons.
-In parallel to the conference, in a neighbouring <i>hacking area</i> a Bug
+In parallel to the conference, in a neighbouring <i>hacking area</i>, a Bug
 Squashing Party will be held, where time will be spent on fixing remaining
 release critical bugs, running upgrade tests and working on the release
 notes for the upcoming release, Debian 6.0 <q>Squeeze</q>.</p>
 
 <p>No registration is necessary to attend the Debian Mini Conference, but
 a ticket for the LinuxTag (available upon request) is needed.  The
-Conference is planed via <a
+Conference is being planned via <a
 href="http://wiki.debconf.org/wiki/Miniconf-LT-Berlin/2010";>the DebConf
 Wiki</a>.</p>
 
@@ -31,19 +31,19 @@
 free, community project. Since then the project has grown to be one of
 the largest and most influential open source projects.  Over three
 thousand volunteers from all over the world work together to create and
-maintain Debian software. Translated into over 30 languages, and
+maintain Debian software. Translated into over 30 languages and
 supporting a huge range of computer types, Debian calls itself the
 <q>universal operating system</q>.</p>
 
 
 <h2>About Mini-DebConf</h2>
 
-<p>A Mini-DebConf is a Debian Project developer conference, which is
-smaller in the number of attendees compared to the full DebConf
+<p>A Mini-DebConf is a Debian Project developer conference, which has
+fewer attendees than the full DebConf that is
 held annually by the Debian project. It still features a full schedule
 of technical, social and policy talks, and thus a Mini-DebConf provides
 an opportunity for developers, contributors and other interested people
-to meet in person and work together closely. Just like its bigger
+to meet in person and work together closely. Just like their bigger
 counterpart, the regular DebConf, Mini-DebConfs have taken place many
 times since 2000 in locations all over the world: Europe, America,
 Asia and Australia.</p>
@@ -51,6 +51,6 @@
 
 <h2>Contact Information</h2>
 
-<p>For further information, please visit the Debian web pages at
+<p>For further information, visit the Debian web pages at
 <a href="http://www.debian.org/";>www.debian.org</a> or send mail to
 &lt;<a href="mailto:press@debian.org";>press@debian.org</a>&gt;.

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