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Re: Please review announcement of upcoming release of Debian 4.0r4 "etch-and-a-half"

Justin B Rye <jbr@xibalba.demon.co.uk> wrote:
> > <p>Please note that this update does not constitute a new version of Debian
> > GNU/Linux 4.0 but only updates some of the packages included.  Even if you need
>                ^insert comma?

s/the packages included/the included packages/

> > new drivers during installation time there is no need to throw away 4.0 CDs or
                                        ^insert comma after time.

> > DVDs. If you don't need newer drivers you'll only to update against
>                                                     ^need
> > ftp.debian.org after an installation, in order to incorporate those late
>   a Debian mirror      XX             X(no comma)               these XXXX
> > changes.</p>

> > <p>Those who frequently install updates from security.debian.org won't have

s/frequently install updates/install updates frequently/

>   <p>Upgrading to this revision online is most easily accomplished by pointing the
>   aptitude (or apt) package tool (see the sources.list(5) manual page) at
>   one of Debian's many FTP or HTTP mirrors.  A comprehensive list of
>   mirrors is available at:</p>

s/is most easily accomplished/should be done/
s/page) at/page) to/

Otherwise, all good changes IMO.  Thanks!
MJ Ray (slef)
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