Re: Please review announcement of upcoming release of Debian 4.0r4 "etch-and-a-half"
Justin B Rye <email@example.com> wrote:
> > <p>Please note that this update does not constitute a new version of Debian
> > GNU/Linux 4.0 but only updates some of the packages included. Even if you need
> ^insert comma?
s/the packages included/the included packages/
> > new drivers during installation time there is no need to throw away 4.0 CDs or
^insert comma after time.
> > DVDs. If you don't need newer drivers you'll only to update against
> > ftp.debian.org after an installation, in order to incorporate those late
> a Debian mirror XX X(no comma) these XXXX
> > changes.</p>
> > <p>Those who frequently install updates from security.debian.org won't have
s/frequently install updates/install updates frequently/
> <p>Upgrading to this revision online is most easily accomplished by pointing the
> aptitude (or apt) package tool (see the sources.list(5) manual page) at
> one of Debian's many FTP or HTTP mirrors. A comprehensive list of
> mirrors is available at:</p>
s/is most easily accomplished/should be done/
s/page) at/page) to/
Otherwise, all good changes IMO. Thanks!
MJ Ray (slef)
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