Re: draft of the release announcement; please review
On (06/04/07 14:34), Alexander Schmehl wrote:
> Hi!
>
> You might have noticed some activity on some lists pointing out, that it
> might a good idea to prepare a special announcement.
>
> A draft is available at http://people.debian.org/~tolimar/release.txt
> and will updated with reflicting your reviews comments and patches to
> correct my germish as my time permits it (remember me to set up an svn
> (?) repo for that kind of stuff).
Hi,
A couple of suggested changes.
> With immediate effect Debian GNU/Linux can be
> downloaded, and will soon be available on DVD and CD-ROM from numerous
> vendors <http://www.debian.org/CD/vendors/>.
I'm not sure about "With immediate effect". I changed it in my diff, but
it's not a crucial change.
> Please note that
> the release notes will be further improved and translated to other
> languages.
I made this sentence a little more explicit, I hope that I captured your
intent.
> Debian 3.1 is another important step in that direction.
*cough*
Thanks,
James
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--- tmp.orig/release.txt 2007-04-06 13:51:04.000000000 +0100
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@@ -31,9 +31,9 @@
DVDs, CDs, USB sticks and floppies, or from the network. While GNOME
remains the default desktop environment to be installed, special CDs
that will install the K Desktop Environment (KDE) or the Xfce desktop
-are also available. With immediate effect Debian GNU/Linux can be
-downloaded, and will soon be available on DVD and CD-ROM from numerous
-vendors <http://www.debian.org/CD/vendors/>.
+are also available. Debian GNU/Linux can be downloaded right now, and
+will soon be available on DVD and CD-ROM from numerous vendors
+<http://www.debian.org/CD/vendors/>.
Debian GNU/Linux runs on computers ranging from palmtops and handheld
systems to supercomputers, and on nearly everything in between. A total
@@ -64,7 +64,7 @@
GNU/Linux, please see the release notes
<http://www.debian.org/releases/etch/releasenotes>. Please note that
the release notes will be further improved and translated to other
-languages.
+languages in the coming weeks.
About Debian
@@ -78,7 +78,7 @@
The Debian project's key strengths are its volunteer base, its dedication
to the Debian Social Contract, and its commitment to provide the best
-operating system possible. Debian 3.1 is another important step in that
+operating system possible. Debian 4.0 is another important step in that
direction.
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