Re: Bug#624785: Erroneous package description

[Justin B Rye <jbr@edlug.org.uk>]

Christian PERRIER wrote:
> Erik's proposal:
> 
> Description: Tool to log your sport activities
>  Pytrainer is a tool to log all your sport excursion coming from GPS
>  devices, including:
>   * Garmin ForeRunnner 205, 305 and 405.
>   * other devices that generate GPX files. 
> 
> My proposal:
> 
> Description: sport activities logging software

All package synopses are about "software", so "tool" is better; and
you don't need to swerve so hard to avoid second person:

  Description: tool for logging sport activities

>  This package provides a tool to log sport activities (such as
>  running, biking, etc.) with data originating from GPS
>  devices, including:
>   * Garmin ForeRunnner 205, 305 and 405;
>   * other devices that generate GPX files.

 * Saying that you log the activities "with" data gets a bit unclear.
 * The general term "sports activities" has already been used in the
   synopsis, so here you can go straight to the specific cases.
 * Two bulletpoints isn't enough to justify making it a list.
 * Surprisingly the Forerunner isn't in camelcase.
So:

Description: tool for logging sport activities
 This package provides a logging tool for runners, cyclists, etc. It
 uses data from GPS-enabled devices that generate GPX files, such as
 the Garmin Forerunnner 205/305/405.

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JBR	with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
	sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package