Re: RE : request for review ITP for guidata and guiqwt

[Martin Eberhard Schauer <Martin.E.Schauer@gmx.de>]

> That says what needs saying, but it's rather a convoluted sentence.
> If you changed "providing" to a full finite verb, that would make it
> a bit less deeply embedded:
>
>    Based on PyQwt (plotting widgets for PyQt4 graphical user interfaces)
>    and on the scientific modules NumPy and SciPy, guiqwt is a Python library
>    that provides efficient 2D data-plotting features (curve/image visualization
>    and related tools) for signal/image processing application development and
>    interactive computing.
>
> (I've also moved "interactive computing" so that it can't be read as
> "for interactive computing app development and signal/image 
> processing app development".)
>
> Part of the trouble is the preposed "Based on..." - it neatly avoids
> having to start the sentence with lowercase "guiqwt", but it makes
> it harder to tweak.  If I'm allowed to rip it apart completely and
> reassemble it "backwards", I get:
>
>    The guiqwt Python library provides efficient 2D data-plotting features
>    (curve/image visualization and related tools) for signal/image processing
>    application development and interactive computing. It's based on the
>    scientific modules NumPy and SciPy, and the PyQwt plotting widgets for
>    PyQt4 graphical user interfaces.
>
> I can't tell which of these I prefer.
>   
Perhaps somebody from the outside can help. I prefer the second
variant. Two comparatively small sentences that are easier to translate.
Unexperienced translators tend to translate from the beginning to
the end producing constructs with words of their native language but
with uncommon structure.

Cheers
  Martin