Re: Bug#502782: [libpam-ldap] "let's" in extended description
(Try again, including reasoning and CCs)
Christian Perrier wrote:
> As I'm in the process of NMU'ing the package for l10n we could use
> this opportunity to review the package description.
> Description: Pluggable Authentication Module allowing LDAP interfaces
"Interfaces" is an odd choice of word - why plural?
> This module let's you use you LDAP server to authenticate users with
> programs that utilize PAM.
s/let's/lets/ and s/you/your/, but get rid of the second person
pronouns (and "utilize" while I'm at it). "With" feels like the
wrong preposition, too; it's easier just to start from scratch.
> If used along with libnss-ldap, you can
> replace your entire flat file (/etc/*) structure or NIS with LDAP.
This dangling participle structure implies it's "you" that's "used
along with libnss-ldap". Then "replace [complex phrase] with LDAP"
is confusing ("...or NIS with LDAP"?), and LDAP certainly doesn't
So I'd suggest:
Description: Pluggable Authentication Module for LDAP
This package provides an interface between an LDAP server and the PAM
user authentication system. Using it along with libnss-ldap allows LDAP
to replace the entire /etc/passwd system, or alternatives such as NIS.
JBR with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package