Re: debian-faq

[Justin B Rye <justin.byam.rye@gmail.com>]

Holger Wansing wrote:
> Justin B Rye <justin.byam.rye@gmail.com> wrote:
>> victory wrote:
>>> #: debian-faq.sgml:49 pkgtools.sgml:133
>>> To list all packages, for which newer package versions are available, run:
>>> 
>>> 2nd "package" is redundant
>> 
>> And by English punctuation rules the comma shouldn't be there either.
> 
> Sorry: the first or the second comma, which shall be removed?

I was looking at the "packages" bit and forgot the end of the sentence!
 
> To list all packages, for which newer package versions are available, run:
>                     ^                                               ^

Drop the first one.  In English, "packages, for which..." introduces a
description that applies to all packages; "packages for which..."
introduces a way of identifying the relevant packages.  You want the 
latter:
  To list all packages for which newer package versions are available, run:

-- 
JBR	with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
	sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package