On Tuesday 29 March 2016, at 19:20 +0200, Holger Wansing wrote: Hi, thanks for working on updating this and other documents. I have some minor comments: > =================================================================== > --- ftparchives.sgml (Revision 10939) > +++ ftparchives.sgml (Arbeitskopie) > @@ -61,14 +61,14 @@ > <item><em>sarge</em> was the sergeant of the Green Plastic Army Men, > <item><em>etch</em> was the toy blackboard (Etch-a-Sketch), > <item><em>lenny</em> was the toy binoculars, > - <item><em>squeeze</em> was the name for the three-eyed aliens, > - <item><em>wheezy</em> was the name of the rubber toy penguin with > + <item><em>squeeze</em> was the three-eyed aliens, I think this should be either "squeeze was the name of the three-eyed aliens" or "squeeze were the three-eyed aliens" , but I think the first one sounds better. > Index: pkgtools.sgml > =================================================================== > --- pkgtools.sgml (Revision 10939) > +++ pkgtools.sgml (Arbeitskopie) > @@ -64,7 +64,7 @@ > <item>Execute the command <tt>dpkg-split --split foo.deb</tt>. > - This will produce N files each of approximately 460 KBytes long in the > + This will produce N files each of approximately 460 KBytes file size in the > current directory. The part "file size" sounds strange to me (not a English native speaker). I would simply say "of approximately 460 KBytes", or "N files each with a file size of approximately 460 KByte" (but it is maybe an unnecessary complication) or "each with an approximate size of 460 KBytes". > Index: uptodate.sgml > =================================================================== > --- uptodate.sgml (Revision 10939) > +++ uptodate.sgml (Arbeitskopie) > @@ -57,7 +57,7 @@ > > <p>Yes. You can use <prgn>cron-apt</prgn>, this tool updates the system at > regular interval by using a cron job. By default it just updates the package > -list and downloads new packages without installing. > +list and downloads new packages, but without installing. > I think it is more common to use the plural "intervals" in the phrase "at regular intervals". Also maybe adding "them" as in "but without installing them."? Ciao, beatrice
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