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Bug#782404: release-notes: re-proofreading



Package: release-notes
Severity: minor
Tags: patch

Revisions to issues.dbk introduce a couple of phrases that could
benefit from extra articles and maybe a change of preposition:

     For more information about the requirements, please refer to
-    section called "REQUIREMENTS" in the <ulink
+    the section called "REQUIREMENTS" in the <ulink
     url="https://sources.debian.net/src/systemd/jessie/README/";>README</ulink>
-    file of <systemitem role="package">systemd</systemitem> package.
+    file for the package <systemitem role="package">systemd</systemitem>.

(Meanwhile I'm following #780573 and see no problems with the new
material there yet.)
-- 
JBR	with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
	sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package
Index: issues.dbk
===================================================================
--- issues.dbk	(revision 10757)
+++ issues.dbk	(working copy)
@@ -516,9 +516,9 @@
   </para>
   <para>
     For more information about the requirements, please refer to
-    section called "REQUIREMENTS" in the <ulink
+    the section called "REQUIREMENTS" in the <ulink
     url="https://sources.debian.net/src/systemd/jessie/README/";>README</ulink>
-    file of <systemitem role="package">systemd</systemitem> package.
+    file for the package <systemitem role="package">systemd</systemitem>.
   </para>
 </section>
 

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