Bug#612008: release-notes: please add emdebian section
Hector Oron wrote:
> Please consider the following patch to add back emdebian section:
If it goes in, please consider the following proofreading tweaks:
> +&releasename; contains the build tools for Emdebian which allow Debian
> +source packages to be cross-built and shrunk to suit embedded systems.
Descriptive relative clauses like this need a comma before the "which"
in English.
> +The Emdebian Grip 2.0 distribution itself contains trimmed down Debian
> +packages sufficient to create root filesystems that can be customised for
> +specific machines and machine variants. Kernels and kernel modules
> +need to be provided separately in most cases.
s/ised/ized/
> +The Emdebian Crush distribution support and developmenthas been dropped
> +for current release.
There's a missing space, obviously, and problems with articles... but
what does it mean to say that development has been dropped for a
stable release? I think what it's trying to say is just:
Support for the Emdebian Crush distribution has been dropped for the
current release.
--
JBR
Ankh kak! (Ancient Egyptian blessing)
--- en/whats-new.dbk (revision 8367)
+++ en/whats-new.dbk (proofread working copy)
@@ -571,6 +571,31 @@
</section>
+<section id="emdebian">
+<title>Emdebian 2.0 (based on &debian; &releasename; &release;)</title>
+<indexterm><primary>Emdebian</primary></indexterm>
+
+<para>
+&releasename; contains the build tools for Emdebian, which allow Debian
+source packages to be cross-built and shrunk to suit embedded systems.
+</para>
+
+<para>
+The Emdebian Grip 2.0 distribution itself contains trimmed down Debian
+packages sufficient to create root filesystems that can be customized for
+specific machines and machine variants. Kernels and kernel modules
+need to be provided separately in most cases.
+</para>
+
+<para>
+Support for the Emdebian Crush distribution has been dropped for the
+current release.
+</para>
+
+<para>
+See the <ulink url="http://www.emdebian.org/release/squeeze/grip/index.html";>
+Emdebian release notes</ulink> for further information.
+</para>
</section>
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