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Bug#397296: marked as done (release-notes)

Your message dated Mon, 6 Nov 2006 22:54:42 +0100
with message-id <20061106215442.GA19126@pluto>
and subject line Bug#397296: release-notes
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Package: release-notes
Version: NUMBER
Severity: wishlist
Tags: l10n, patch
While creating my translation of the Etch release-notes I have encountered the following typos, which I thought you might like to fix before the next release. 
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1.

po:33
Translator:	③	type: <p></p>
Original: ⌘0 The <em>debian-volatile</em> service that was introduced as an unofficial 
service with the release of &oldreleasename, has now become an official
Debian service.

- &oldreleasename,
+ &oldreleasename;,


2.

.po:54
Translator:	③	type: <p></p>
Original: ⌘0 It's wise to inform all users in advance of any upgrades you're planning, 
although users accessing your system via an <prgn>ssh</prgn> connection
should notice little during the upgrade, and shold be able to continue
working. If you wish to take extra precautions, back up or unmount users' partitions (<file>/home</file>) before upgrading. A reboot will not normally 
be necessary, unless you plan to also upgrade your kernel.

- shold
+ should

- unless you plan to also upgrade your kernel.
+ unless you also plan to upgrade your kernel.


3.

po:112
Translator:	③	type: <p></p>
Original: ⌘0 The recommended tool for upgrading between &debian; releases is to use the 
package management tool <prgn>aptitude</prgn>. This tool makes safer
decisions about package installations than running <prgn>apt-get</prgn>
directly.

Too many "tool"s in this para. I suggest:

+
The recommended way to upgrade from previous &debian; releases is to use the 
package management tool <prgn>aptitude</prgn>. This program makes safer
decisions about package installations than running <prgn>apt-get</prgn>
directly.


4.
.po:139
Translator:	③	type: <p></p>
Original: ⌘0 New versions of currently installed packages that cannot be upgraded without changing the install status of another package will be left at their current version (displayed as \"held back\"). This can be resolved by either using <prgn>aptitude</prgn> to choose these packages for installation or by trying 
<tt>aptitude -f install <var>package</var></tt>.

- <var>package</var>
+ <var>package_name</var>
In other strings, you use "package_name", which is clearer for users to understand: 

po:76
Translator:	③	type: <example></example>
Original:	⌘0	# aptitude hold <var>package_name</var>

po:149
Translator:	③	type: <example></example>
Original:	⌘0	# dpkg --remove <var>package_name</var>

.po:157
Translator:	③	type: <example></example>
Original:	⌘0	# dpkg -r --force-depends <var>package_name</var>


so I make this suggestion.

This also applies to:

po:219
Translator:	③	type: <p></p>
Original:	⌘0	Documentation for individual packages is installed into
<file>/usr/share/doc/<var>package</var></file>, this may include copyright 
information, Debian specific details and any upstream documentation.



5.

po:175
Translator:	③	type: <p><example>
Original: ⌘0 As mentioned above, in many cases <prgn>mdadm</prgn> can work without configuration file. If you use a kernel that automatically configures the 
RAID array for you, can skip this paragraph &mdash; you merely have to
install the package <package>mdadm</package> and the RAID will be detected during the boot process. The standard kernels in Debian have support for the configuration of RAID arrays on boot. You also need to make sure that the partitions are set to type \"Linux raid autodetect\" (id <tt>fd</ tt>). The 
following command will list the current type of partitions:

- without configuration file.
+ without a configuration file.
- If you use a kernel that automatically configures the RAID array for you, can skip this paragraph + If you use a kernel that automatically configures the RAID array for you, you can skip this paragraph 

- have support for
+ support


6.

po:218
Translator:	③	type: <p></p>
Original: ⌘0 Beyond these release notes and the installation guide further documentation on &debian; is available from the Debian Documentation Project (DDP), whose 
goal is to create high quality documentation for Debian users and
developers. Documentation including the Debian Guide, Debian New Maintainers Guide, and Debian FAQ are available, and many more. For full details of the 
resources available see the <url id=\"&url-ddp;\" name=\"DDP website\">.
- Beyond these release notes and the installation guide further documentation + Beyond these release notes and the installation guide, further documentation 

- high quality documentation
+ high-quality documentation

- Documentation including the Debian Guide, Debian New Maintainers
Guide, and Debian FAQ are available, and many more.
+ There are a great many documents available, including the Debian Guide, the Debian New Maintainers' Guide, and the Debian FAQs. 

-  For full details of the resources available see
+ For full details of the current resources, see

("available" has already been used in the previous sentence).


7.

po:225
Translator:	③	type: <p></p>
Original: ⌘0 Debian has an IRC channel dedicated to the support and aid of Debian users located on the OFTC IRC network which exists to provide interactive services 
to peer-directed project communities. To access the channel point your
favourite IRC client at &debian-irc-server; and join #debian.
- Debian has an IRC channel dedicated to the support and aid of Debian users located on the OFTC IRC network which exists to provide interactive services 
to peer-directed project communities.
+ Debian has an IRC channel dedicated to the support and aid of Debian users, located on the OFTC IRC network which exists to provide interactive services 
to peer-directed project communities.

- To access the channel point
+ To access the channel, point
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I hope this is useful.
Clytie Siddall (vi-VN, Vietnamese free-software translation team / nhóm Việt hóa phần mềm tự do)

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Hi Clytie,

On Mon, Nov 06, 2006 at 10:11:14PM +1030, Clytie Siddall wrote:
> Package: release-notes
> Version: NUMBER

NUMBER is not a valid version number. Omit it if unsure.

> While creating my translation of the Etch release-notes I have  
> encountered the following typos, which I thought you might like to  
> fix before the next release.

Thanks.

> po:33
> Translator:	③	type: <p></p>
> Original:	⌘0	The <em>debian-volatile</em> service that was  

What file format to you quote? What does ③ and ⌘0 mean?

> introduced as an unofficial
> service with the release of &oldreleasename, has now become an official
> Debian service.
> 
> - &oldreleasename,
> + &oldreleasename;,

That's not required but it's a good style to use ";". It also helps
syntax highlighting in editors ...

> .po:54
> Translator:	③	type: <p></p>
> Original:	⌘0	It's wise to inform all users in advance of any  
> upgrades you're planning,
> although users accessing your system via an <prgn>ssh</prgn> connection
> should notice little during the upgrade, and shold be able to continue
> 
> - shold
> + should

That was already fixed.

> - unless you plan to also upgrade your kernel.
> + unless you also plan to upgrade your kernel.

Fixed.
 
> Original:	⌘0	The recommended tool for upgrading between &debian;  
> releases is to use the
> package management tool <prgn>aptitude</prgn>. This tool makes safer
> decisions about package installations than running <prgn>apt-get</prgn>
> directly.
> 
> Too many "tool"s in this para. I suggest:
> 
> +
> The recommended way to upgrade from previous &debian; releases is to  
> use the
> package management tool <prgn>aptitude</prgn>. This program makes safer
> decisions about package installations than running <prgn>apt-get</prgn>
> directly.

Fixed.

> - <var>package</var>
> + <var>package_name</var>
> 
> In other strings, you use "package_name", which is clearer for users  
> to understand:

I did not change this. I would even suggest to use <var>package</var>
instead of <var>package_name</var>.

> - without configuration file.
> + without a configuration file.
> 
> - If you use a kernel that automatically configures the RAID array  
> for you, can skip this paragraph
> + If you use a kernel that automatically configures the RAID array  
> for you, you can skip this paragraph

I slighly changed this to "the RAID array, you can"

> - have support for
> + support

OK.
 
> - Beyond these release notes and the installation guide further  
> documentation
> + Beyond these release notes and the installation guide, further  
> documentation

Probably OK, fixed.

> - high quality documentation
> + high-quality documentation

I'm not sure about this. Not yet fixed.

> - Documentation including the Debian Guide, Debian New Maintainers
> Guide, and Debian FAQ are available, and many more.
> + There are a great many documents available, including the Debian  
> Guide, the Debian New Maintainers' Guide, and the Debian FAQs.

OK.

> -  For full details of the resources available see
> + For full details of the current resources, see

I used "For full details of the existing resources see"

> ("available" has already been used in the previous sentence).
 
> Original:	⌘0	Debian has an IRC channel dedicated to the support 
> and  aid of Debian users
> located on the OFTC IRC network which exists to provide interactive  
> services
> to peer-directed project communities. To access the channel point your
> favourite IRC client at &debian-irc-server; and join #debian.
> 
> - Debian has an IRC channel dedicated to the support and aid of  
> Debian users
> located on the OFTC IRC network which exists to provide interactive  
> services
> to peer-directed project communities.
> + Debian has an IRC channel dedicated to the support and aid of  
> Debian users,
> located on the OFTC IRC network which exists to provide interactive  
> services
> to peer-directed project communities.

I'm not sure about this comma.

> - To access the channel point
> + To access the channel, point

Fixed.

> I hope this is useful.

It is, thanks. Nevertheless it would be easier if you send a patch
(output of diff -u old.file new.file).

Jens

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