Re: [RFC] Draft of announcement and errata, last chance of change
On Saturday 20 February 2010, Otavio Salvador wrote:
> The Debian Installer Team[1] is pleased to announce the Debian Installer
> 6.0 Alpha1. This is our first release since Lenny and brings a lot of
> new features and improvements.
Better: This first release since Lenny brings a lot of new features and
improvements
> As most people has noticed, this release has taken more time then
s/has/will have/
s/then/than/
> usual. This was due a lot of different reasons that goes from technical
s/goes/go/
> (major changes in installer itself and other components that affect us)
> to lack of man power to manage all needed things in timely way. We
s/man power/manpower/
> really need more people to help us and contribute, please contact us if
> you're interested in help.
s/in help/in helping/
IMO you should mention here that the graphical version of the installer has
been disabled for this release and why. That's not just an erratum.
> Bellow goes the most important new features and improvements.
s/goes//
> Help during the installation process
> ------------------------------------
> The dialogs presented during the installation process now have the
> possibility to offer a help option for user. This is already in use in
> some dialogs during the installation and its usage will grow during next
> releases. We belive this is going to improve the user experience during
> the installation process for new users.
s/belive/believe/
s/is going to/will/
s/process for/process, especially for/
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