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Re: General Resolution: Statement about the EU Legislation "Cyber Resilience Act and Product Liability Directive"



On 2023-11-19 22:45 +0100, Debian Project Secretary - Kurt Roeckx wrote:
> 
> More information can be found at:
> https://www.debian.org/vote/2023/vote_002

This is generally good, but can we fix the typos and English-as-2nd-language issues before voting?

Or is it too late already? I don't feel we should be putting out an
official project statement with mistakes/English like this. And
(assuming we are going to fix this) it feels wrong to vote on a text
before it is finalised.

Things I noticed:

1) Discoverded -> Discovered

2) "a fine-tuned, well working system "
 This is very peculiar, not really correct, english. At the very least 'well-working' needs hyphenating. "well-functioning"? "tried-and-tested"? Maybe just re-arrange the sentence.

3) "to keep even with" -> "to retain parity with" 

4) "It is not understandable why" -> "It is not comprehensible why"
or probably better:
  "It is not understandable why the EU aims to" ->  "It makes no sense for the EU to aim to"

HTH (did none of the seconders notice this stuff?). I guess I should
join -project or -vote some day...

Wookey
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