Re: Constitutional Amendment GR: Handling assets for the project
On Fri, 21 Jul 2006 22:26:27 +1200, Nick Phillips <nwp@nz.lemon-computing.com> said:
> MJ Ray wrote:
>> Manoj Srivastava <srivasta@debian.org>
>> I suggested rewording this condition-less conditional phrase:
>> >> + It would be preferable if the organizations holding assets in
>> >> + trust for Debian undertake certain obligations for the handling of
>> >> + such assets, as an example:
>> as:
>> + It is preferred that the organizations holding assests in
>> + trust for Debian undertake certain obligations for the handling
>> of
>> + such assets, as an example:
>> or more normally and concisely:
>> + Organizations holding assets in trust for Debian should undertake
>> + obligations for the handling of such assets, similar to this:
>> Please will you accept one of those amendments?
> You're right to correct the original, but I don't think you've
> nailed it yet.
> If there's a "should" then "obligation" is clearly the wrong word to
> go with it. And you don't "undertake an obligation" -- you "meet an
> obligation", or "undertake to meet" it.
> So maybe:
> Organisations holding assets in trust for Debian will be required to
> meet certain obligations in their handling of such assets...
> or
> It is preferred that organisations holding assets in trust for
> Debian should comply with certain conditions regarding their
> handling of such assets...
How about:
+ It would be preferable if the organizations holding assets in
+ trust for Debian would undertake to meet certain obligations for
+ the handling of such assets, as an example:
It remains in future tense, it is still an indication of
preference, as opposed to an imperative "required tomeet certain
obligations", and "it would be preferable if the children would be
quiet" seems perfectly correct and has the advantage of flowing far
more mellifluously off my tongue :P
manoj
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