Re: Mini-DebConf India: review needed for /events/ page text
Francesca Ciceri wrote:
> I've just added the page about the Mini-DebConf India on the /events/
> section of www.debian.org .
# VALU (VIT Active Linux Users) and CoFSUG (COEP Free Software Users
# Group) are organizing a Mini-DebConf at Pune, India. This event will
# welcome everyone with an interest in the Debian project for a series
# of talks and workshops about Debian. The main goal of this event is
# encourage people in contributing to Debian by bringing existing
# Debian contributors as mentors: "Listen, Learn and Practice" is the
# event's motto!
Missing word: "The main goal of this event is ^to^ encourage", and
probably "is to encourage people to contribute".
"Bringing" isn't quite the right word - "involving"? "Acquiring"?
Most en_US styleguides would say that motto needs an extra comma:
"Listen, Learn, and Practice".
# The India Mini-DebConf 2011 will be held at Viskwakarma Institute of
# Technology of Pune.
"Technology of Pune" sounds strange, and indeed www.vit.edu calls it
just "Viskwakarma Institute of Technology, Pune".
(Tut tut, www.vit.edu has a stray apostrophe on the first line of
text... but it's text-as-jpeg, so I can't send them a patch.)
# Debian Involvement
# There will be several talks and workshops, as well as a special Q&A
# session about Debian and a keysigning party.
JBR with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package