On Fri, Jul 08, 2011 at 01:00:40PM -0400, Filipus Klutiero wrote: > Thank you Francesca, here are my remarks: > > >The Debian Project, the team behind the free Debian GNU/Linux > >operating syste, would like to invite you to participate in the upcoming > >Debian Day which will take place on 24th of July 2011 at Banski Dvor, > >Banja Luka, Republic of Srpska, Bosnia and Herzegovina as first day of > >the Annual Debian Conference. > s/syste/system/ > > >During Debian Day, the conference opens its door to anyone interested > >in finding out more about Debian and Free Software, inviting enthusiast, > >users and developers to a full day of talks on several subjects such as Free > >Software in government, design and Free Software, Free Software advocacy > >as well as a string of talks about the Debian project and operating > >system. > I would use "doors" instead of "door". > s/enthusiast/enthusiasts/ > > >After the<q>Debian Day opening plenary</q> during which Adnan Hodzic > >will welcome attendees, will be delivered, among others, the following > >talks: > This may be valid, but putting the subject after the verb is unusual. > > >More information about it, and a complete schedule, could > >be found at<a > >href="http://www.debianday.org";>http://www.debianday.org</a>. > Shouldn't this read "*can* be found"? Definitely :) Justin has already applied your changes. > > Note that the capitalization of "Project" in "Debian project" is not > consistent. > You're right: what you suggest about it (uppercase Project or not)? Thank you very much for your review, Francesca -- <taffit> eof: when I want something | "Convince people with results, done quickly, I don't wait for | rather than words" others ;) | Enrico Zini
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