Re: [DRAFT FOR REVIEW] Steve McIntyre elected Debian Project Leader 2008
Hello,
Thanks for all suggestions and corrections.
There are still some paragraphs with doubts.
The first version I copied from announcement email (english is not my
native language).
Two suggestions reworded the "shall soon be up at the election page"
differently.
What is the correct formal english? (remember, it is a Debian announcement,
not a blog).
The fourth paragraph is (almost) an excerpt from the actual scientific
study,
so I tried to minimally adapt it to the text.
Please, compare the original and the adapted for suggestions:
"Organizations without a consensual basis of authority lack an important
condition necessary
for their survival (Coleman, 1980; Harrison, 1960; Etzioni, 1959).
Organizations with directly democratic forms of participation do not tend
to scale well and
are noted for their difficulty managing complexity and
decision-making – all of which can hasten their demise
(Whyte and Whyte, 1988; Rothschild and Russell, 1986; Rothschild and Whitt,
1986; Johnson and Whyte, 1977)."
"Organizations without a common understanding of authority and leadership
can not survive in the long term.
And those with direct democratic forms of participation do not tend to
scale well and are noted
for their difficulty managing complexity and decision-making, leading to
failure."
The suggestion at, now, 5th paragraph could change intended message, so I
reworded to
"since 1993, having established "
Please, review the newest version [0] and also review the "About Debian
Project" section.
Regards.
Andre Felipe
[0] http://times.debian.net/1232
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