Re: [DRAFT READY FOR REVIEW] Skolelinux wins the Scandinavian Free Software award
On Sat, 15 Dec 2007, Andre Felipe Machado wrote:
> Hello,
> Please, review the draft 1206 [0] and send suggestions, corrections.
> debian.times.net editors can edit the draft at the site.
> As previously asked, I pasted the unformatted draft text below for
> comments. Please review the online formatted and hiperlinked draft [0]
> before December 19th.
See suggested changes attached.
Don Armstrong
--
Whatever you do will be insignificant, but it is very important that
you do it.
-- Mohandas Karamchand Gandhi
http://www.donarmstrong.com http://rzlab.ucr.edu
--- skoelinux_draft_orig.txt 2007-12-14 20:03:48.000000000 -0800
+++ skoelinux_draft.txt 2007-12-14 20:03:36.000000000 -0800
@@ -3,55 +3,57 @@
success-stories
Debian Edu / Skolelinux wins the Scandinavian Free Software Award
-The Free Software Foundation Europe announced that the international
-project Debian-Edu / Skolelinux is the winner of the first Free Software
-Scandinavian Award, during the Free Software Conference Scandinavia
-2007, in G�org, Sweden, December 7th, 2007.
-
-"Debian-Edu / Skolelinux captures a big part of the free software
-spirit; sharing and reusing. By focusing on schools, Debian-Edu /
-Skolelinux makes sure students, tomorrow's computer users, and decision
-makers, can grow up in a spirit of sharing, reusing and learning from
-family, friends and neighbours."
-
-"Debian-Edu / Skolelinux has combined important, and dedicated work
-contributions with technical knowledge and political skills."
-
-"The adoption of Debian-Edu / Skolelinux in so many countries around the
-globe shows that the use of Free Software and open standards has really
-been spreading in a very positive way."
-"The next milestone will be the merge of different school systems based
-on Free Software. The largest example will be the merge between
+The Free Software Foundation Europe announced that Debian-Edu /
+Skolelinux, an international project, is the winner of the first
+Scandinavian Free Software Award, during the Free Software Conference
+Scandinavia 2007, in G�org, Sweden, December 7th, 2007.
+
+"Debian-Edu / Skolelinux captures a big part of the Free Software
+spirit: sharing and reusing. By focusing on schools, Debian-Edu /
+Skolelinux makes sure students, who are tomorrow's computer users and
+decision makers, can grow up with the spirit of sharing, reusing, and
+learning from family, friends, and neighbours."
+
+"Debian-Edu / Skolelinux has combined dedicated work and important
+contributions with technical excellence and political skills."
+
+"The adoption of Debian-Edu / Skolelinux in many countries around the
+globe shows that the use of Free Software and open standards has
+spread in a very positive way."
+
+"The next milestone will be the merging of different school systems
+based on Free Software. The largest example will be the merge between
Debian-Edu / Skolelinux and the very successful Spanish GNU/LinEx
project which has, at the moment, more than 250.000 users and 80.000
-workstations in use at schools in Extremadura. The one laptop for every
-two pupils project."
+workstations in use at schools in Extremadura, as part of the 'one
+laptop for every two pupils' project."
-"Both Debian-Edu / Skolelinux and the GNU / LinEx builds on Debian GNU /
-Linux and can enjoy the many synergy effects."
+"Both Debian-Edu / Skolelinux and the GNU / LinEx builds upon Debian
+GNU / Linux and enjoy the many benefits of building upon a easily
+extendable, well tested, and Free operating system.
-More information about the Debian-Edu / Skolelinux award can be found at
-the FSFE announcement.
+More information about the Scandinavian Free Software award can be
+found in the FSFE announcement. [Add link to the FSFE announcement]
About Debian Edu / Skolelinux
Debian-Edu / Skolelinux is a Custom Debian Distribution (CDD) from the
-Debian-edu international project team.
-
-Skolelinux is a complete tailored software solution for the needs of any
-educational institution or school.
+international Debian-edu project team, which forms a complete,
+tailored software solution for the needs of any educational
+institution or school.
-It is a ready computer system were your school does not need to piece
-together the components.
+It is a ready-to-use computer operating system, allowing schools to
+forgo the need need to piece together components.
-You can read more about here.
+You can read more about Skolelinux here.
About Debian
+
Debian GNU/Linux is one of the free operating systems (GNU/Linux,
GNU/Hurd, GNU/NetBSD, GNU/kFreeBSD), developed by more than a thousand
-volunteers from all over the world who collaborate via the Internet at
-the Debian Project website.
+volunteers from all over the world who collaborate via the Internet on
+the Debian Project.
Debian's dedication to Free Software, its non-profit nature, and its
open development model make it unique among GNU/Linux distributions.
@@ -62,27 +64,27 @@
About GNU / Linex
-The GNU / Linex is a Debian based GNU/Linux distribution produced by the
-Community of Extremadura (Spain). Well known in linux-spanish circles,
-this veteran distribution has open the spanish public administration and
-schools to the Open Source / Free Software world.
+The GNU / Linex is a Debian-based GNU/Linux distribution produced by
+the Community of Extremadura (Spain). Well known in linux circles in
+Spain, this veteran distribution has opened the Spanish public
+administration and schools to the Open Source / Free Software world.
About Free Software Foundation Europe
The Free Software Foundation Europe (FSFE) is a non-profit and (in some
countries) charitable non-governmental organization dedicated to Free
-Software as in freedom.
+Software.
Vision of Free Software
-Access to software determines who may participate in a digital society.
-Therefore, the freedoms to use, copy, modify and redistribute software
--- as described in the Free Software definition -- allow equal
-participation in the information age.
+Access to software determines who may participate in a digital
+society. Therefore, the freedom to use, copy, modify and redistribute
+software -- as described in the Free Software definition -- are
+necessary to allow equal participation in the information age.
The vision of Free Software is one of a stable basis for freedom in a
digital world -- both in an economic and socio-ethical context. Free
-Software is one important cornerstone for freedom, democracy, human
+Software is one important cornerstone for freedom, democracy, Human
rights and development in a digital society.
The FSFE is dedicated to supporting all aspects of Free Software in
@@ -91,5 +93,4 @@
development of Free Software are central issues of the FSFE.
-
[0] http://times.debian.net/1206
Debian Edu Skolelinux wins the Scandinavian Free Software Award
contributed by andremachado, published on Sat Dec 15 03:47:36 2007 in
success-stories
Debian Edu / Skolelinux wins the Scandinavian Free Software Award
The Free Software Foundation Europe announced that [-the international
project-] Debian-Edu / [-Skolelinux-]
{+Skolelinux, an international project,+} is the winner of the first
{+Scandinavian+} Free Software
[-Scandinavian-] Award, during the Free Software Conference
Scandinavia 2007, in G�org, Sweden, December 7th, 2007.
"Debian-Edu / Skolelinux captures a big part of the [-free software
spirit;-] {+Free Software
spirit:+} sharing and reusing. By focusing on schools, Debian-Edu /
Skolelinux makes sure students, {+who are+} tomorrow's computer [-users,-] {+users+} and
decision makers, can grow up [-in a-] {+with the+} spirit of sharing, [-reusing-] {+reusing,+} and
learning from family, [-friends-] {+friends,+} and neighbours."
"Debian-Edu / Skolelinux has combined [-important, and-] dedicated work {+and important+}
contributions with technical [-knowledge-] {+excellence+} and political skills."
"The adoption of Debian-Edu / Skolelinux in [-so-] many countries around the
globe shows that the use of Free Software and open standards has [-really
been spreading-]
{+spread+} in a very positive way."
"The next milestone will be the [-merge-] {+merging+} of different school systems
based on Free Software. The largest example will be the merge between
Debian-Edu / Skolelinux and the very successful Spanish GNU/LinEx
project which has, at the moment, more than 250.000 users and 80.000
workstations in use at schools in [-Extremadura. The one-] {+Extremadura, as part of the 'one+}
laptop for every two [-pupils-] {+pupils'+} project."
"Both Debian-Edu / Skolelinux and the GNU / LinEx builds [-on-] {+upon+} Debian
GNU / Linux and [-can-] enjoy the many [-synergy effects."-] {+benefits of building upon a easily
extendable, well tested, and Free operating system.+}
More information about the [-Debian-Edu / Skolelinux-] {+Scandinavian Free Software+} award can be
found [-at-] {+in+} the FSFE announcement. {+[Add link to the FSFE announcement]+}
About Debian Edu / Skolelinux
Debian-Edu / Skolelinux is a Custom Debian Distribution (CDD) from the
[-Debian-edu-]
international {+Debian-edu+} project [-team.
Skolelinux is-] {+team, which forms+} a [-complete-] {+complete,+}
tailored software solution for the needs of any educational
institution or school.
It is a [-ready-] {+ready-to-use+} computer [-system were your school does not-] {+operating system, allowing schools to
forgo the need+} need to piece together [-the-] components.
You can read more about {+Skolelinux+} here.
About Debian
Debian GNU/Linux is one of the free operating systems (GNU/Linux,
GNU/Hurd, GNU/NetBSD, GNU/kFreeBSD), developed by more than a thousand
volunteers from all over the world who collaborate via the Internet [-at-] {+on+}
the Debian [-Project website.-] {+Project.+}
Debian's dedication to Free Software, its non-profit nature, and its
open development model make it unique among GNU/Linux distributions.
The Debian project's key strengths are its volunteer base, its
dedication to the Debian Social Contract, and its commitment to provide
the best operating system possible.
About GNU / Linex
The GNU / Linex is a [-Debian based-] {+Debian-based+} GNU/Linux distribution produced by
the Community of Extremadura (Spain). Well known in [-linux-spanish circles,-] {+linux circles in
Spain,+} this veteran distribution has [-open-] {+opened+} the [-spanish-] {+Spanish+} public
administration and schools to the Open Source / Free Software world.
About Free Software Foundation Europe
The Free Software Foundation Europe (FSFE) is a non-profit and (in some
countries) charitable non-governmental organization dedicated to Free
[-Software as in freedom.-]
{+Software.+}
Vision of Free Software
Access to software determines who may participate in a digital
society. Therefore, the [-freedoms-] {+freedom+} to use, copy, modify and redistribute
software -- as described in the Free Software definition -- {+are
necessary to+} allow equal participation in the information age.
The vision of Free Software is one of a stable basis for freedom in a
digital world -- both in an economic and socio-ethical context. Free
Software is one important cornerstone for freedom, democracy, [-human-] {+Human+}
rights and development in a digital society.
The FSFE is dedicated to supporting all aspects of Free Software in
Europe. Creating awareness for these issues, securing Free Software
politically and legally, and giving people freedom by supporting
development of Free Software are central issues of the FSFE.
[0] http://times.debian.net/1206
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