andremachado wrote: > As the first tier-one world class vendor I'd suggest dropping this fairly strange string of adjectives. > The new support services offering leverages the knowledge of 6500 > professionals worldwide dedicated to open source, at the company that for the > four fiscal quarters ended April 30, 2006, had revenue totaled $88.9 billion. ^^^^^ ^^^^^^^ ending totaling > > HP already offered special support contract services (http://www.hp.com/linux > ) for customized Debian version for corporate customers, most at telecom ^ ^^^^ ^^ a mostly? for the > industry ( http://www.progeny.com/customers/hp.htm ). > > == HP and Debian Project == > > This is not the first time HP shows appreciation for Debian GNU/Linux, being ^^^^^ has shown > involved with Debian Project since 1995. > HP is a sponsor and colaborator of Debian Project, donating hosting and > bandwidth for various servers of the project. Also, uses Debian GNU / Linux as ^ HP > a reference developer platform ( > http://opensource.hp.com/opensource_projects.html ) > Already uses Debian GNU / Linux in its print server devices and Network ^ HP already > Attached Storage (NAS). > > The CTO, Bdale Garbee, is a Debian Developer, and was elected Debian Project > Leader for a mandate ( ^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ??????? > http://www.debian.org/doc/manuals/project-history/ch-leaders ) and in august > 2006 was elected ( > http://www.spi-inc.org/news-items/new-spi-board-of-directors-and-officers.html/ > ) volunteer board president of Software in the Public Interest, SPI ( > http://www.spi-inc.org ) that is the legal face of the Debian Project. > > Bruce Perens ( http://www.perens.com ) was already an employee of HP ( ^^^^^^^ previously or also > http://www.perens.com/Articles/Bio.html ) , and also an elected Debian Project > Leader ( http://www.debian.org/doc/manuals/project-history/ch-leaders) and the > previous volunteer board president of SPI. > > The HP open source team has a good expertise already. In 2005, among 48,000 ^ remove Above are the most glaring problems, however even with these fixed it scans as being written by someone for whom English is not a first language, and could stand a rewrite, IMHO. (No offense intended.) -- see shy jo
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