Re: New version of nm-step2
On Mon, Aug 18, 2003 at 10:41:21AM -0400, Anthony DeRobertis wrote:
> On Sunday, Aug 17, 2003, at 19:50 US/Eastern, Andrew Suffield wrote:
> >"A few weeks after registering, if you still haven't received any
> >offers, then you can send e-mail to <email firstname.lastname@example.org>
> >telling them precisely where you live (give the names of some big
> >cities close to you)."
> Alternatively, "If you don't receive any offers within a few weeks of
> registering, then you may [not can, you always can]...."
> Now, "precisely" and some close big cities don't seem to fit together
> too well. Maybe, "...telling them precisely where you live as well as
> the closest major cities."
I think the sense is not "please give us your ICBM coordinates" but
"please say where you live in more detail than just your country". I'd
rephrase to something like this, maybe:
"... telling them where you live so that somebody near you can be
found (give the names of some big cities close to you)"
Colin Watson [email@example.com]