Re: New EULA of UnrealIRCd
Branden wrote:
> On Tue, Oct 29, 2002 at 10:47:06PM +0100, Mika Fischer wrote:
> > ---
> > The UnrealIRCd Team reserves the right to modify this agreement at anytime as
> > long as notice is given on the unrealircd.com main page at least 24 hours
> > before changes take effect. The modified agreement will only effect new
> > downloads, downloads completed before the new agreement takes effect will
> > still be governed by the agreement that was accepted by the end user at the
> > original time of download.
> > ---
> >
> > If the last paragraph of the original EULA was changed to this one, would
> > there be any more problems?
>
> I see a comma splice; they need to change that last comma to a
> semicolon.[1]
>
>
> [1] Yes, it's a minor point, but poor grammar degrades clarity. One
> wants clarity in legal language even more than in regular conversation.
I'd agree about clarity so I feel I should point this out too: the first
'effect' is wrong it should be 'affect':
> > The modified agreement will only affect new downloads, downloads
> > completed before the new agreement takes effect will still be governed
> > by the agreement that was accepted by the end user at the original
> > time of download.
(otherwise the modified agreement would be causing new downloads, not
specifying things about them).
HTH
[ It's possible that this is different in American English - much as
they don't distinguish beteen 'ensure' (make sure) and 'insure' (buy
insurance), using 'insure' for both? In which case if the EULA is written
by/for Americans then it would be correct, but would be wrong if considered
in British English. ]
Wookey
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