Re: debian-faq: Patch2 to improve wording or meaning, remove superfluous words, consistentency ...
Hi Justin,
Justin B Rye <justin.byam.rye@gmail.com> wrote:
> Holger Wansing wrote:
[...]
> > <p>Parts of the information came from:
> > <list>
> > - <item>The Debian-1.1 release announcement, by <url name="Bruce Perens" id="http://www.perens.com/";>.
> > - <item>The Linux FAQ, by <url name="Ian Jackson" id="http://www.chiark.greenend.org.uk/~ijackson/";>.
> > + <item>The Debian-1.1 release announcement, by <url name="Bruce Perens" id="http://www.perens.com/";>,
> > + <item>The Linux FAQ, by <url name="Ian Jackson" id="http://www.chiark.greenend.org.uk/~ijackson/";>,
> ^
> I'm not sure about the item-initial capitalisation here - if we're
> treating "The Linux FAQ" as a title, shouldn't it be in quotes or
> something?
I don't see the globally strategy in this document, to place titles inside
of quotes.
So changing to such strategy would require most probably many changes...
[...]
> > <item><em>sarge</em> was the sergeant of the Green Plastic Army Men,
> > <item><em>etch</em> was the toy blackboard (Etch-a-Sketch),
>
> (Do people think of etch-a-sketches as blackboards? For a start,
> isn't it more of a whiteboard?)
I personally have no preference here (german speaker).
What would you suggest?
> > <item><em>lenny</em> was the toy binoculars,
> > - <item><em>squeeze</em> was the name for the three-eyed aliens,
> > - <item><em>wheezy</em> was the name of the rubber toy penguin with
> > + <item><em>squeeze</em> was the three-eyed aliens,
>
> You could I suppose say that "Squeeze" *referred to* the aliens, but I
> think the simplest approach is to keep "the name for/of" in this one
> case.
>
> (Actually I'm not sure the name "Squeeze" was ever mentioned in the
> original movie, though it might be in the merchandising or the
> screenplay or something. And technically the names used in Toy Story
> all obeyed the standard capitalisation rules of English orthography!)
More than that: what would you propose (since someone told me, Squeeze
could be seen as more than one person [three-eyed] ):
<item><em>squeeze</em> was the name of the three-eyed alien
<item><em>squeeze</em> was the name of the three-eyed aliens
I personally would use alien
> > + <item><em>wheezy</em> was the rubber toy penguin with
> > a red bow tie,
> > - <item><em>jessie</em> was the name of the yodelling cowgirl,
> > - <item><em>stretch</em> was the name of the toy rubber octopus with suckers on her eight long arms.
> > + <item><em>jessie</em> was the yodelling cowgirl,
> ^
> If we're standardising to en_US, isn't that usually "yodeling" (cf.
> "traveling")?
Changed to yodeling
> > Index: uptodate.sgml
> > ===================================================================
> > --- uptodate.sgml (Revision 10939)
> > +++ uptodate.sgml (Arbeitskopie)
> > @@ -57,7 +57,7 @@
> > Answer any questions that might come up, and your system will be upgraded.
> >
> > <p>Note that <prgn/aptitude/ is not the recommended tool for
> > -doing upgrades from one &debian; release to another. For upgrades between
> > +doing upgrades from one &debian; release to another. Use <prgn/apt-get/ instead. For upgrades between
> > releases you should read the <url
> > id="http://www.debian.org/releases/stable/releasenotes"; name="Release
> > Notes">. This document describes in detail the recommended steps for upgrades
> >
> > @@ -92,9 +92,8 @@
> > be used. The configuration file is <file>/etc/apt/sources.list</file>.
> > See also <ref id="dselect">.
>
> (No, don't see dselect!)
I will note that for further discussion...
For the rest I followed your suggestions.
Thanks
Holger
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