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Re: [RFR] templates://dyfi/{templates}

On Tue, Sep 29, Christian PERRIER wrote:

(Sorry about that delay, I had an 11-day broadband outage!)

> That's a full rewrite, as original templates were....very short..:-)
> Justin, I have my usual doubts about "login to"...:-)

Yes, it's not wrong enough that it'll trip people up, but it's a
separable verb: "log in to".  (The third option I occasionally see
people use is "log into", but I prefer the three-word version.)

> Template: dyfi/username
> Type: string
> _Description: Username on dy.fi:
>  Please provide the user name that should be used to login to dy.fi
                          ^                               ^
>  services and update dynamic hostname mappings.

Also, it's a username (like "ajm") rather than a user('s) name.
> Template: dyfi/password
> Type: password
> _Description: Password on dy.fi:
>  Please provide the password that should be used to login to dy.fi
>  services and update dynamic hostname mappings.
> Template: dyfi/hosts
> Type: string
> _Description: Registered hostnames on dy.fi:
>  Please provide a space-separated list of hostnames that should be
>  dynamically updated by dy.fi services.

No problems here.

In the control file:
> Package: dyfi
> Description: Client for updating dynamic hostname mappings for dy.fi
Should be lowercase.

>  This is a client software (which runs as daemon) for automatically updating
>  dynamic hostname mappings at dy.fi - free dynamic DNS service offered
>  exclusively for Finnish users.

There's no such thing as a software (and besides, if it comes in
a Debian package, we already know it's software!), so just say
"this is a client".

Two missing articles: "as a daemon", "a free dynamic DNS service".

>  .
>  This client software lets you configure your credentials and hostname(s)
>  upon install. These credentials and hostname(s) must be registered at dy.fi
>  website beforehand.

The same "software" problem and some unnecessary repetition:

   On install, this client lets you configure your credentials and
   hostname(s), which must be registered at the dy.fi website beforehand.

JBR	with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
	sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package

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