Filipus Klutiero wrote:
On 2011-06-05 18:33, David Prévot wrote:
[...]
So, it's time to update
<a
href="http://lists.debian.org/debian-devel-announce/2011/05/msg00007.html";>fingerprints</a>
<a
href="http://lists.debian.org/debian-devel-announce/2011/05/msg00008.html";>for
the two hosts</a>.
The link on "for the two hosts" is weird.
It's a difficult one, given that we need two links but we don't want
to get bogged down in describing them (since the second is a
correction). Maybe we could use
So it's time for a<a href=".../msg00007.html">fingerprint</a>
<a href=".../msg00008.html">update</a> for the two hosts.
The formulation is also
odd. It sounds like all readers would need to upgrade fingerprints,
although presumably only a minority do.
I don't follow - do you mean because they've already done it, because
they'll never access both hosts, because there's some alternative way
of handling a host-side fingerprint change, or what?
[...]
Per Andersson and Hedvig Kamp wrote a series of article about Free
Software in general, and Debian in particular, in a Swedish newspaper,
Fria Tidningen.
No comma is needed before an "and".
It's legal, and, together with the one after "particular", marks the
phrase as an aside.
[...]
in the paper edition
there is also a big fat Debian Women logo
Let's avoid this poor formulation and replace with "a [very] large
logo of Debian Women".
Oops, yes. How about "there is a great big Debian Women logo, too" to
maintain a similar informal tone? (s/also/too/ because I've just
noticed there's another "also" in the same line.)