Re: Request for Review: Debian Project News 2008/06
On Sun, Jul 6, 2008 at 3:36 PM, Alexander Reichle-Schmehl <tolimar@debian.org> wrote:
Hi!
We just finished the sixth issue of the Debian Project News.
It it available at <http://wiki.debian.org/ProjectNews/Issues/Current>.
Would be nice, if some native speakers could take a look at it.
Yours sincerely,
Alexander
Hi Alexander,
The link, http://www.debian.org/News/project/2008/06, is broken.
Original: He also asks for new members for the team. Especially for Lenny's (currently not supported) kernel packages new volunteers would be needed.
Suggested: He also asks for new members for the team, especially for Lenny's (currently not supported) kernel packages.
or
Suggested: He also asks for new members for the team. New volunteers would be needed, especially for Lenny's (currently not supported) kernel packages.
or
Suggested: He also asks for new members for the team. They would be needed, especially for Lenny's (currently not supported) kernel packages.
Original: New Mebers for the New Maintainer Front Desk
Corrected: New Members for the New Maintainer Front Desk
Original: Call for Talks: DebianDay Argentinia
Corrected: Call for Talks: DebianDay Argentina
Original: Users might just notice that something called "triggers" is now additionally called after packages have already been installed, but won't notice that the triggers do actually save computing time during a packages installation.
Corrected: Users might just notice that something called "triggers" is now additionally called after packages have already been installed, but won't notice that the triggers do actually save computing time during a package's installation.
Original: After getting to know each other three years ago through their Debian work Debian Developers Meike Reichle and Alexander Schmehl were married on Saturday, 28 July 2008, at Lake Constance in Germany, marking the first time two Debian Developers were joined in marriage.
Suggested: After getting to know each other three years ago through their Debian work, Debian Developers Meike Reichle and Alexander Schmehl were married on Saturday, 28 July 2008, at Lake Constance in Germany. This marks the first time two Debian Developers were joined in marriage.
Note: I'm guessing the date was Saturday, 28 June 2008.
Original: Dann Frazier asked for reviews for of the release notes of the upcoming release of Debian GNU/Linux 4.0r4. Since this point release will optionally support newer versions of the Linux Kernel, additional care is needed for them.
Corrected: Dann Frazier asked for reviews of the release notes of the upcoming release of Debian GNU/Linux 4.0r4. Since this point release will optionally support newer versions of the Linux Kernel, additional care is needed for them.
Original: Mention who has contributed here
Suggested: Contributors
General suggestion: either capitalize all words in the headings or just the first one word, excepting of course proper nouns.
Regards,
Sebastian
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