Re: debian-faq: Patch2 to improve wording or meaning, remove superfluous words, consistentency ...
Hi,
Joost van Baal-Ilić <joostvb-debian-doc-20160329-1@mdcc.cx> wrote:
> > <item>many developers, volunteers, and beta testers, and
> > - <item>the flaky memories of its authors. :-)
> > - <item>Kamaraju Kusumanchi's <url name="Choosing a Debian distribution FAQ" id="http://people.cornell.edu/pages/kk288/debian_choosing_distribution.html";>, who graciously made it GPL so I could include it as a new chapter (see <ref id="choosing">)
> > + <item>the flaky memories of its authors :-)
> > + <item>and Kamaraju Kusumanchi's <url name="Choosing a Debian distribution FAQ" id="http://people.cornell.edu/pages/kk288/debian_choosing_distribution.html";>, who graciously made it GPL so I could include it as a new chapter (see <ref id="choosing">).
> > </list>
>
> s/so I could include/so it could be included/
Yes.
> > <p>The authors would like to thank all those who helped make this
> > Index: ftparchives.sgml
> > ===================================================================
> > --- ftparchives.sgml (Revision 10939)
> > +++ ftparchives.sgml (Arbeitskopie)
> > @@ -61,14 +61,14 @@
> > <item><em>sarge</em> was the sergeant of the Green Plastic Army Men,
> [...]
> > <!-- SID should be the last line always -->
> > @@ -423,7 +423,7 @@
> > using the standard Debian package management tools, you can set up your own
> > apt-able package archive. This is also useful if you'd like to share your
> > Debian packages while these are not distributed by the Debian project.
> > -Instructions on how to do this are given in the <url name="Debian Repository
> > +Instructions on how to do this are given in the (obsolete) <url name="Debian Repository
> > HOWTO"
> > id="http://www.debian.org/doc/manuals/repository-howto/repository-howto";>.
>
> Better not mention obsolete stuff at all.
I will mark this for further discussion.
> >
> > +### In the following, change the examples into a senseful ordering,
> > +### as it is also executed by user.
> > - <item>To upgrade all the packages on your system (without installing
> > - extra packages or removing packages), run:
> [...]
>
> # is not a comment mark in smgl, use
>
> <!-- In the following, change the examples into a senseful ordering,
> as it is also executed by user. -->
Ok. Although I inserted the lines just as a comment in the patch (to explain
changings). I don't wanted to keep that comments in the sgml file.
> > @@ -103,8 +99,12 @@
> >
> > <item>To remove the foo package and its configuration files from your
> > system, run:
> > - <example>apt-get --purge remove foo</example>
> > + <example>apt-get purge foo</example>
>
> I'd use "apt", not "apt-get", as the standard tool for package management.
Since that is likely a lot of more work (and that changings are of that
sort, which I can unfuzzy in the translations easily), I will split that
apt-get -> apt changings into a separate patch.
Thanks
Holger
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