Re: ITP: silc -- Secure Internet Live Conferencing
On Sat, Nov 03, 2001 at 08:59:08PM -0800, Aaron Lehmann wrote:
> Just text corrections -
>
> On Sun, Nov 04, 2001 at 05:10:32AM +0100, Tamas SZERB wrote:
> > Description: SILC - Secure Internet Live Conferencing
> > SILC (Secure Internet Live Conferencing) is a protocol which provides
> > secure conferencing services in the Internet over insecure channel.
> s/in/on/
Also s/over insecure/over an insecure/
> > SILC is IRC like softwarre although internally they are very different.
> s/IRC like/IRC-like/; s/softwarre/software/
> > Biggest similarity between SILC and IRC is that they both provide
> s/Biggest/The biggest/
> > conferencing services and that SILC has almost same commands as IRC. Other
> s/same/the same/
> > than that they are nothing alike. Biggest differences are that SILC is
> s/Biggest/Some major/
> > secure what IRC is not in any way. The network model is also entirely
> s/what/when/
> > different compared to IRC.
Your text corrections are fine, but the description is awkward. Something
better would be:
"SILC (Secure Internet Live Conferencing) is a protocol which provides
secure conferencing services over an insecure channel. SILC provides
similar services to IRC with almost identical commands. However,
SILC is secure where IRC is not, and it has an entirely different
network model."
This is (IMHO) a lot less clumsy. Also there is no need to mention
'The Internet' as the package is probably also suitable for intranets,
extranets etc. I'm not even sure that the point about the network
model is worth mentioning in the package description. Make that:
"SILC (Secure Internet Live Conferencing) is a protocol which provides
secure conferencing services over an insecure channel. SILC provides
similar services to IRC with almost identical commands. However,
SILC is secure where IRC is not."
regards
Hamish
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Hamish Moffatt VK3SB <hamish@debian.org> <hamish@cloud.net.au>
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