>>>>> "Chris" == Chris Lawrence <email@example.com> writes: Great work, Chris... though still I felt free to give my EUR 0.02... ;-) Chris> The Debian Project is pleased to announce the latest release of the Chris> Debian GNU/Linux Operating System, version 2.2. This release has been Chris> in production for approximately 18 months, and has been extensively Chris> continuously tested by several thousand developers and end-users; Kill one of "extensively" or "continuously", or rephrase it. This way it sounds horrible. (I'd strike continuously... people are not used to this word in press releases ;-) Chris> accordingly, we believe Debian 2.2 is the best-tested Linux Chris> distribution ever. Could we do with a little less hype? I'd strike that. Chris> As in previous releases, Debian 2.2 uses our proven dpkg Chris> package manager to provide the most thorough dependency Chris> protection available in Linux distributions. s/protection/tracking/... anything but protection, basically. Please. ;-) Chris> We continue to provide the alien package for Chris> installation of packages in other formats, but you'll Chris> rarely need it; we have installers available for many Chris> third-party packages that we don't distribute. Is this necessary? I mean, should we be short and to the point, namely, what's changed? I'd strike that... or at least strike the "you'll rarely need it". I think we should really try to not try to out-hype the other `vendors'. Chris> Perhaps the most significant change in Debian 2.2 is our Chris> transition to version 2.1.2 of the GNU C Library (also Chris> known as libc 6.1). Debian 2.2 also includes the latest Chris> stable Linux kernel (2.2.16), updated with Alan Cox's Chris> patches expected to go into 2.2.17. There's no 2.2.16 package anywhere, and the 2.2.17 looks confusingly like... well, 2.2.17. So, mention 2.2.17-pre<whatever> explicitly. People might be confused? Well, I'd rather `confuse' people with the truth than with half- or non-truths. Suggested rewording: "includes the latest *stable* Linux kernel (2.2.17-pre<whatever>)." <rant>Can you tell that I don't like this -pre<anything> stuff? How come we do 2.2.17-pre*, but not (for example), gtk-1.2.8? Principles are good, but you can overdo it.</rant> [...] Chris> Debian 2.2 includes over 1200 new packages of software; in addition, Chris> nearly 800 existing packages have been updated since Debian 2.1. Some Chris> of the most significant changes are: Chris> * New packages: [...] Chris> + reportbug - A tool to report problems in the first place. How about: "A command-line bug-reporting tool with a nice interface, written in Python." Python, yay! ;-) [...] Chris> + logrotate - A log rotation tool, developed by Red Hat Chris> Software. Uhm, not something most users *need*... I've used it, but 95% of all users out there will probably never touch it. Strike it. [...] Chris> + gnome-napster, gnapster, gnap - Three Napster implementations Chris> for all your RIAA-defying needs. Well, this spoils the tone used until now... this sounds to haX0r-ish for the generally serious document. Strike (at least) that "RIAA-defying"... could even be the RIAA doesn't like it, and I'd rather not try to get into their sights. [...] Chris> + GTK+/GLib 1.2.7 - The free widget set Too bad there's already 1.2.8... this already makes us look bad. *sigh* [...] Chris> Debian 2.2 also includes support for two new architectures, PowerPC Chris> and ARM; with this addition, Debian now runs on six architectures, Chris> more than any other Linux distribution. Replace "runs on" with "supports". We should be careful to emphasize that Debian *supports* those, as, for example, RedHat also "runs on" 68K (right?), but it is not officially supported. Debian is the only Distribution where *all* available platforms are treated equally. [...] Chris> As with previous releases, we expect upgrades from any Chris> Debian release to work without problems. As has already been mentioned somewhere else, we should make people expect that this "from *any*" will work for all future releases too. So, if you strike that "As with previous releases", then it would be ok (I think). Chris> Administrators will appreciate the widespread of the Pluggable You want to say "widespreadness", right? But I doubt this is a word... hmm, how to rephrase that? Think... think... "Wide use"!!! 'S that ok? Or did you just forget "use" after "widespread"? ;-) [...] Chris> Perhaps the most interesting social change since Debian "Social change"? Strike "social". Or use... I don't know, maybe "societal". Or is my English *that* bad? ;-) I'd simply strike "social". Chris> 2.1 has been the adoption of the Debian system as a Chris> basis for commercial Linux distributions. Corel, Stormix Chris> Technologies, and VA Linux Systems are among the Chris> companies that currently distribute distributions based *argh*... "deliver", "sell", "deploy"... but not "distribute distributions". Or replace "distributions" with "versions" or s.th. (I've just used "dict" to look up synonyms of "distribute"... but "dole out" is not good for this context, right? ;-) Chris> on Debian; others are on the horizon. What remains the Chris> same, however, is the project's volunteer base, its Chris> dedication to the Debian Social Contract, and its Chris> commitment to provide the best operating system Chris> possible. We think Debian 2.2 is an important step in Chris> that direction. Great finale to a great (minus my comments ;-) document. Again, thanks, Chris. Bye, J -- Jürgen A. Erhard eMail: firstname.lastname@example.org phone: (GERMANY) 0721 27326 MARS: http://members.tripod.com/Juergen_Erhard/mars_index.html Internet Movie Database (http://www.imdb.com) I have a firm grip on reality, now I can strangle it.
Description: PGP signature