Re: DFSG v2 Draft #5
A few minor nits (many stylistic):
On Jan 24, Darren Benham wrote:
> This document, in it's source form, exists in DebianDoc
^^^^
should be its (the possessive of it) not it's (short for "it is")
> 2.1. Use
> ---------
>
> Anyone must be able to use the software in any way without paying a
> fee or royalty or performing special actions.
"performing special actions" seems a bit vague. How about "... a fee
or royalty. In addition, it must not obligate users to perform any
additional actions (such as advertising their use of the software)."
> The license must remain valid until the licensee terminates it or
> violates the terms of the license
Needs a period (full stop) at the end of the line.
> 3.3. License of Derived Works
> ------------------------------
>
> The license can require modified and derived software be distributed
> under the same license or the general requirement "any compatible
> license."
I'd recommend using 'general requirement of "any compatible license."'
> The license may also require the license of modified and derived
> software be restricted to the same license or to any license that
> meets these software has the choice of license as long as they meet
> these guidelines.
I think your sentence got mangled here. "...the same license or to any
license that meets these guidelines."
> The license my not impose restrictions on third-party software that
> merely resides on the same system or distribution as the licensed
> software.
distribution -> medium
Chris
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