I went down to 6.3.3 (Setting up the system).
General
We seem to lack consistent writing of "file system". There are numerous
occurrences of "filesystem"
We also seem to lack consistency about "mount point" which is
sometimes written as "mountpoint"
./boot-installer/trouble.xml:There are two very simple things that you should try first.
"There are two very simple things that you should try first:" as this
is followed by an enumeration
./boot-installer/trouble.xml:console. Only the English
./boot-installer/trouble.xml-language will be available during the installation due to limited
" Only the English language will be available" (when disabling the
framebuffer). That's not true anymore. Should be "Only some
supported languages will be available" as we indeed have all
Latin-1 based languages.
./boot-installer/trouble.xml:fix it. If you are submitting a bug report you may want to attach
Possibly missig comma "If you are submitting a bug report, you..."
./using-d-i/using-d-i.xml:Shows a list of keyboards, from which the user chooses the model which
./using-d-i/using-d-i.xml-matches his own.
"Shows a list of keyboards, from which the user chooses the model which matches his own."
Non gender-neutral.
I'm not sure about the best gender-neutral formulation. Something
like "Shows a list of keyboards, from which the model matching your
keyboard can be chosen"
./using-d-i/using-d-i.xml:Presents a list of Debian archive mirrors. The user may choose
./using-d-i/using-d-i.xml-the source of his installation packages.
Non gender-neutral
"The user may chooser the source for installed packages"?
./using-d-i/using-d-i.xml:start menu. This way the user could easily choose at the boot time
Missing(?) comma: "This way, the user..."
./using-d-i/components.xml:In this section we will describe each installer component in
Missing(?) comma: "In this section, we will...
./using-d-i/modules/netcfg.xml:a DHCP server in your local network at all. For further explanation
./using-d-i/modules/netcfg.xml-check the error messages on the third console. In any case, you will
Missing(?) comma: "For further explanation, check..."
./using-d-i/modules/netcfg.xml:be asked if you want to retry, or if you want to perform manual
./using-d-i/modules/netcfg.xml-setup. DHCP servers are sometimes really slow in their responses, so
I'm not sure whether an article is required before "manual setup":
"if you want to perform A manual setup"
./using-d-i/modules/partman.xml:configuration menu. This is the same screen like when creating
./using-d-i/modules/partman.xml-a new partition, so you can change the same settings. One thing
"This is the same screen like when creating..." sounds like....
...spoken French literally translated to English...:-). In short,
I wouldn't be surprised if I had written it, which is usually not
a very good sign of good English
I would write "This screen is identical to the screen shown when
creating..."
./using-d-i/modules/mdcfg.xml:RAID5 has similar setup procedure as RAID1 with the exception that you
Missing article? "RAID5 has A similar setup procedure..."
./using-d-i/modules/mdcfg.xml-It is perfectly possible to have several types of MD at once. For
./using-d-i/modules/mdcfg.xml:example if you have three 200 GB hard drives dedicated to MD, each
Missing comma? "For example, if you..."
./using-d-i/modules/mdcfg.xml:containing two 100 GB partitions, you can combine first partitions on
Missing article? "you can combine THE first partitions..."
./using-d-i/modules/partman-lvm.xml:the partition table (if any) and after that the LVM configuration menu will
Missing commas? "and, after that, the LVM...."
./using-d-i/modules/partman-crypto.xml:method. As always: when in doubt, use the defaults, because
Colon instead of comma: "As always, when in doubt, ..."
./using-d-i/modules/partman-crypto.xml:Please see the the section on random keys above.
./using-d-i/modules/partman-crypto.xml:Please see the the section on erasing data above.
Double "the"
./using-d-i/modules/partman-crypto.xml-other actions such as writing a new partition table. For large
./using-d-i/modules/partman-crypto.xml:partitions this might take some time.
Missing comma? "For large partitions, this might..."
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