Re: intro/about
On Fri, Aug 31, 2001 at 08:34:23AM +0200, Josip Rodin wrote:
> On Thu, Aug 30, 2001 at 11:29:56PM -0500, James A. Treacy wrote:
> >
> > Before translators do updates, I'd like to discuss some of the changes
> > with you. I should be on #debian-devel later today (yikes, it's after
> > midnight already).
> >
> Well, I just got up :) and I'm always for discussion. :)
>
For now, here are some points of discussion pertaining to this
one document:
You say free, but the CDs cost money!
vs
You say free, but the CDs/bandwidth cost money!
Personally, I find the original less confusing. Saying 'bandwidth
costs money' makes me think someone is going to send a bill (above
what is normally paid for connectivity) to download software.
Of course you need to pay for connectivity, so what was the point of
this change?
I suggest changing the word costless to 'without cost' on line 101.
I also notice you removed the term 'open source' in one spot (the last
occurence on the page). We are not about to miraculously make the free
vs open source debate go away, but we do need to decide how the terms
will be used on our pages. One suggestion has been to sidestep the issue
by using DFSG. After all, that is what the social contract is about.
Please start a new flamewar^Wthread if you'd like to discuss this.
Although Debian is non-profit, we do have expenses.
vs
We don't make any profit from doing any of this, and we do have
various expenses.
It's not clear what you didn't like about the original. How about
Debian does not make any money from the sale of CDs, but we do have
expenses.
Also, we need to change
<A href="$(HOME)/donations">donate</A>
to
<A href="$(HOME)/donations">donates</A>
Since you'd like to combine the hardware and architecuture sections, I
suggest making the distinction more clear (plus a minor addition):
<P>Debian will run on most popular personal computers. The list of
architectures that Debian supports is constantly growing. For a complete
list, see the <A HREF="../releases/stable/">stable release
information</A>.
<P>Almost all common hardware is supported.
If you would like to be sure that everything you have is supported,
check out the
changed to:
<P>Debian will run on almost all personal computers, including most
older models. The list of
architectures that Debian supports is constantly growing. For a complete
list, see the <A HREF="../releases/stable/">stable release
information</A>.
<P>Almost all common hardware is supported.
If you would like to be sure that all the devices [anyone prefer peripherals?]
connected to your machine are supported, check the
Another change:
<P>Don't take our word for it - try Debian out yourself. Since hard disk
space has become less expensive, you can probably spare about 500MB to try
out Debian. Debian can be easily installed on this extra space
and can coexist with your existing OS. If you eventually need more space,
you can simply delete one of your OSes (and after you see the power of the
Debian system, we are sure it won't be ours).
to
<P>Don't take our word for it - try Debian yourself. Since hard disk
space has become less expensive, you can probably spare 500MB.
Debian can easily be installed on this extra space
and can coexist with your existing OS. If you eventually need more space,
you can simply delete one of your OSes (and after you see the power of a
Debian system, we are confident which one it will be).
Section
How do I get support?<
was changed to
I can't set it up all by myself. Where do I get support for Debian?
That doesn't sound to bad except what follows tells them to try and
install it themselves. I suggest changing it back (s/How/Where/ if you
want).
This
For users of IRC, there is a channel, #debian, dedicated to Debian, at irc.debian.org
was changed to
For users of IRC, there is a channel dedicated to Debian,
it's called #debian and you can access it at <code>irc.debian.org</code>.
Nothing wrong there except it's a run-on sentence. Simply use
For users of IRC, there is a channel dedicated to Debian.
It's called #debian and you can access it at <code>irc.debian.org</code>.
--
James (Jay) Treacy
treacy@debian.org
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