Re: Draft for lenny release announcement

[Margarita Manterola <margamanterola@gmail.com>]

Regarding the release notes:

There seems to be an inconsistency with the use of the verb tense.
Since this is the release announcement, I think it should always be
present tense.  So:

<p>Debian GNU/Linux 5.0 (Lenny) will include the new ARM EABI port,
<q>Armel</q>.

should be:

<p>Debian GNU/Linux 5.0 (Lenny) includes the new ARM EABI port, <q>Armel</q>.

And,

into Debian GNU/Linux 5.0 made it possible to ship Java based

Should be:

into Debian GNU/Linux 5.0 makes it possible to ship Java based

Also a couple of grammatical fixes,

 As a result the old ARM port (arm) has now been deprecated.</p>

should be:

 As a result, the old ARM port (arm) has now been deprecated.</p>

And,

of a package in the native language of the user if available. An other

Should be,

of a package in the native language of the user if available. Another

The versions in the games paragraph seem totally redundant, since it's
"additions", not upgrades.  And goplay is mentioned twice, which is
also quite redundant.  I think the two games paragraphs should be
merged.

-- 
Besos,
Marga