Re: Draft for lenny release announcement
Hi Alexander,
Some suggestions..
On Tue, February 10, 2009 22:02, Alexander Reichle-Schmehl wrote:
> I think content wise we are done; it's quite long for an announcement,
> but I think it's still okay. So please give it an other content check,
> which I will add tomorrow.
| <p>Debian GNU/Linux runs on computers ranging from ...
| <p>Debian GNU/Linux 5.0 (Lenny) will include the new ARM EABI port,
| <q>Armel</q>...
| <p>This includes support for Marvell's Orion platform or devices based on
| the Orion platform...
The last paragraph doesn't make sense, because "this" seems to refer to
armel. I think it originally followed right after the first quoted one,
and then it does make sense, and the armel one was probably added
inbetween lateron. I suggest to either move the armel paragraph one down
or to reword the beginning of the last one a bit.
| The installer boot process has also received many attention:
"many" should be "much"
cheers,
Thijs
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