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Minor release-notes improvements



Hi,

the attached patch contains a few minor improvements to the release
notes such as
 * corrected SGML tags
 * the fixed file name of README.Debian-upgrade.gz for X updates
 * instructions how to hold/unhold packages using dpkg when aptitude in
   not available
 * an additional conditional related to kernel 2.6 (please check)
 * and a few wording improvements (check these very carefully!!)

Jens
Index: release-notes.en.sgml
===================================================================
RCS file: /cvs/debian-doc/ddp/manuals.sgml/release-notes/en/release-notes.en.sgml,v
retrieving revision 1.38
diff -u -r1.38 release-notes.en.sgml
--- release-notes.en.sgml	22 May 2005 19:11:24 -0000	1.38
+++ release-notes.en.sgml	22 May 2005 23:00:37 -0000
@@ -121,7 +121,7 @@
            update stable packages that contain information that quickly goes out
            of date. Examples are a virus scanner's signatures list or a spam
            filter's pattern set. An administrator can use the "volatile.debian.net"
-           archive with similar ease to the "security.debian.org" archive, and
+           archive with similar ease as the "security.debian.org" archive, and
            enjoy the use of packages with up-to-date information without the
            hassle and risks of maintaining an entire (or partial) system based
            on bleeding-edge packages. For more information and a list of mirrors,
@@ -168,7 +168,7 @@
 <![ %i386 [ 
 
           <p>For the &arch-title; architecture, a special set of installation
-          floppy disk images, "speakup", is available for the blind.
+          floppy disk images, "speakup", is available for the blind man.
           These images have a special kernel that supports braille displays.
           A complete list of supported models may be found in the brltty
           documentation. See the <url id="&url-installer;index#speakup"
@@ -226,6 +226,7 @@
 
 <![ %sparc [ 
       <sect id="sparc_kbd"><heading>Issues with keyboards on &arch-title;</heading>
+      <!-- merge with keyboard section below? -->
 
         <p>There are several issues with keyboard selection during installation.</p>
 
@@ -337,7 +338,7 @@
            are very rare. It is possible that sun4d CPUs with an MMU work.</p>
 
            <p>sun4m CPUs are still supported but you need to install a newer kernel
-           version first before upgrading the system. This because newer
+           version first before upgrading the system. This is necessary because newer
            versions of glibc use assembler instructions not available on certain
            machines, so you need a updated kernel first that emulates the missing
            instructions.</p>
@@ -358,7 +359,7 @@
 
 <![ %hppa [
           <p>On 64bit HPPA machines you will need to upgrade to a newer
-          kernel version first before upgrading the system. This because newer
+          kernel version first before upgrading the system. This is necessary because newer
           versions of glibc use assembler instructions not available on certain
           machines, so you need an updated kernel first that emulates the missing
           instructions.</p>
@@ -372,7 +373,8 @@
 
 <![ %mips-mipsel [
           <p>On &arch-title; machines you will need to upgrade to a newer
-          kernel version first before upgrading the system. This is because
+	  <!-- FIXME: what kernel version is required? -->
+          kernel version first before upgrading the system. This is necessary because
           of a inconsistent definition of the inter process communication
           of the new libc and the kernel, so you need an updated kernel
           that provides the correct definition first.</p>
@@ -401,7 +403,7 @@
 	<sect1><heading>Disabling APT pinning</heading>
 
 	  <p>If you have configured APT to install certain packages from a
-	  distribution other than stable (e.g from testing), you may have to
+	  distribution other than stable (e.g. from testing), you may have to
 	  change your APT pinning configuration (stored in
 	  <file>/etc/apt/preferences</file>) to allow the upgrade of packages to
 	  the versions in the new stable release. Further information on APT
@@ -447,10 +449,14 @@
           <p>If you changed and recompiled a package locally, and didn't rename
           it or put an epoch in the version, you must put it on hold to prevent
           it from being upgraded. The `hold' package state can be changed by
-          using <prgn/aptitude/. With 
+          using <prgn/dpkg/ with either
 	  
       	  <example>
-aptitude hold | unhold &lt;package&gt;
+echo "<var>package</var> hold" | dpkg --set-selections
+      	  </example>
+	  or
+      	  <example>
+echo "<var>package</var> install" | dpkg --set-selections
       	  </example>
     	    </p>
         </sect1>
@@ -529,7 +535,7 @@
 
            <p>Instead of using HTTP or FTP packages mirrors, you may wish to
            modify <file>/etc/apt/sources.list</file> to use a mirror on a
-           local disk (possibly NFS-mounted).</p>
+           local disk (possibly NFS mounted).</p>
 
            <p>For example, your packages mirror may be under
            <file>/var/ftp/debian/</file>, and have main directories like
@@ -557,12 +563,12 @@
 
         <sect1 id="cdroms"><heading>Adding APT source from CD-ROM</heading>
 
-<!-- FJP: Are these instructions also valid for adding DVD's? -->
-
-          <p>If you want to use CDs <em/only/, comment out the existing
+          <p>If you want to use CDs (or DVDs) <em/only/, comment out the existing
           "<tt/deb/" lines in <file>/etc/apt/sources.list</file> by placing
           a hash sign (<tt/#/) in front of them.</p>
 
+          <!-- default cdrom mount point is /cdrom not /media/cdrom and fixed!, see #282344,
+              (but the -d option of apt-cdrom allows scanning from somewhere else) -->
           <p>Make sure there is a line in <file>/etc/fstab</file> that
           enables mounting your CD-ROM drive at the <file>/cdrom</file>
           mount point (the exact <file>/cdrom</file> mount point is required
@@ -618,7 +624,7 @@
 	  
 	  <p>It is strongly recommended that you use the
 	  <prgn>/usr/bin/script</prgn> program to record a transcript of the
-	  upgrade session. Then if any problems develop, you will have a log of
+	  upgrade session. Then if any problem occurs, you will have a log of
 	  what happened, and if needed, can provide exact information in a bug
 	  report. To start the recording, type:
 
@@ -677,7 +683,7 @@
 	  be left at their current version (displayed as "held back"). This can
 	  be resolved by either using <prgn>aptitude</prgn> to choose these
 	  packages for installation or by trying <tt>aptitude -f install
-	  &lt;package&gt;</tt>.</p>
+	  <var>package</var></tt>.</p>
             
           <p>The <tt/--fix-broken/ (or just <tt/-f/) option causes
           <package/apt/ to attempt to correct a system with broken
@@ -713,7 +719,7 @@
           command like
 
           <example>
-dpkg --install /path/to/packagename.deb
+dpkg --install <var>/path/to/packagename.deb</var>
           </example></p>
 
           <p>After fixing things up, you should be able to resume the
@@ -741,8 +747,8 @@
           "formal" upgrade is complete, but there are some other things
           that should be taken care of <em/before/ the next reboot.</p>
           
-  <p>Read
-	  <file>/usr/share/doc/xfree86-common/README.Debian-upgrade</file> for
+          <p>Read
+	  <file>/usr/share/doc/xfree86-common/README.Debian-upgrade.gz</file> for
 	  more info on the upgrade of the X window system packages. This is
 	  relevant for users of all previous Debian releases. In short, you
 	  need to read it.</p>
@@ -843,10 +849,11 @@
 </sect>
 
 <![ %not-s390 [
+    <![ %available-2.6 [
         <sect id="kernel_update">
         <heading>Keyboard issues on upgrades to a 2.6 kernel</heading>
 
-          <p>After the upgrade to &releasename;, you may have 2.6 kernel images
+          <p>After the upgrade to &releasename;, you have 2.6 kernel images
           available for installation. There is an important change in the
           input layer for 2.6 kernels that you should be aware of before you
           attempt to switch from using a 2.4 to a 2.6 kernel.</p>
@@ -858,7 +865,7 @@
           after rebooting with the new 2.6 kernel.</p>
           
           <p>If you can SSH into the box from another system, you can resolve
-          this issue by running 'dpkg-reconfigure console-data', choosing
+          this issue by running <tt>dpkg-reconfigure console-data</tt>, choosing
           the option "Select keymap from full list" and selecting a "pc"
           keyboard.</p>
 
@@ -874,6 +881,7 @@
 ]]>
         </sect>
 ]]>
+]]>
 
 <![ %i386 [
 
@@ -887,6 +895,7 @@
           X client applications which connect with it fail with the following
           error message:
 
+<!-- line to long for PDF, wrap?-->
 <example>
 X Error of failed request:  BadLength (poly request too large or internal Xlib length error)
 Major opcode of failed request:  18 (X_ChangeProperty)
@@ -1087,7 +1096,7 @@
                 </list></p>
 
                 <p>Then install the package using <tt>dpkg -i</tt>. It may
-                complain about module mismatches (from modutils) and ask if
+                complain about module mismatches (from <package>modutils</package>) and ask if
                 the installation should continue. Answer <tt>YES</tt> to
                 that question as these mismatches will be resolved as soon
                 as you reboot with the new kernel.</p>

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