[Debconf-team] Further suggestion for flyer and brochure

[znoteer@mailbox.org]

Hi all,

I have a couple more suggestions for the flyer.  I brought these up on #dc-t where there was some limited discussion (started at 19:12 UTC, for those who want to see it).  

"Access to swag in conference bags" sounds like sponsors, bronze and up, can take what they want from the swag bags.  We want to let them know that, rather, that they can put things in the swag bags.

After some discussion with another native English speaker, we came up with "Provide materials for conference bags".  Ie., they can put stuff in the bags.  It also removes the word swag which may not be understood in all countries.

Changing it in the flyer implies changing it in the brochure as well.

The other suggestion is to remove the triple repetition of "sponsor" and "sponsorship" in the "for further information" sentence below the table.  Thus,

     "For further information about Debian and DebConf, a complete description of the advantages of the various sponsor levels, as well as further sponsorship opportunities, please see our detailed sponsorship brochure.

would become

     "For further information about Debian and DebConf, a complete description of the advantages of the various sponsorship levels, as well as further opportunities, please see our detailed brochure.

Should the community find these suggestions acceptable, there are diffs attached to this message.

Thanks,
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znoteer
znoteer@mailbox.org

--- flyer.en.tex	2017-09-28 18:26:35.090524064 -0400
+++ flyer.en.znoteer_02.tex	2017-09-29 15:01:34.742193542 -0400
@@ -188,7 +188,7 @@
     < \${2,000} & \${2,000} & \${5,000} & \${10,000} & \${20,000} \\
     Logo on sponsor webpage
     & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ \\
-    Access to swag in conference bags
+    Promotional materials in conference bags
     & & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ \\
     Logo on t-shirts and conference bags &
     & & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ \\
@@ -216,8 +216,7 @@
 \vspace{0.2cm}
 
 For further information about Debian and DebConf, a complete description of the
-advantages of the various sponsor levels, as well as further sponsorship
-opportunities, please see our detailed sponsorship brochure:
+advantages of the various sponsorship levels, as well as further opportunities, please see our detailed brochure:
 
 \end{large}
 

--- brochure.en.tex	2017-09-28 18:26:34.862522573 -0400
+++ brochure.en.znoteer_02.tex	2017-09-29 15:05:51.095725082 -0400
@@ -509,7 +509,7 @@
     < \${2,000} & \${2,000} & \${5,000} & \${10,000} & \${20,000} \\
     Logo on sponsor webpage
     & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ \\
-    Access to swag bags
+    Promotional materials in conference bags
     & & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ \\
     Logo on t-shirts and conference bags &
     & & $\surd$ & $\surd$ & $\surd$ \\