Re: Draft for lenny release announcement
- While I'm glad you mention Orion support, I don't think you should
start a new paragraph with "This includes support for" - what does
"this" refer to?
- Also, you mention Orion support and then in the same sentence you
talk about "Netbooks, such as the EEE PC". This suggests that
those netbooks are based on an Orion chip, which is not true. Why
don't you write something like: Debian lenny adds support for
Marvell's Orion platform which is used in many storage devices.
Supported storage devices include the QNAP Turbo Station series,
HP Media Vault mv2120, and Buffalo Kurobox Pro. Additionally,
lenny now supports several Netbooks, in particular the EEE PC by Asus.